retrodisco666

Hey, The repetition in this piece scares me,and not in the way I like. It is a strange scared, so well done, I guess. I actually like what you're trying ...

Hey, congratulations, you have written a piece where, for me, the rhyme doesn't feel forced and works. So that automatically makes this poem amazing. However you misspelled poem at the ...

Hey, I like the content in this piece. It's main problem, is punctuation. You have capitals where they're not needed amongst other things. The structure of sentences are just the ...

Hey, This is a really good piece. It reminds me of Salome by carol Ann Duffy. I think this is a really good style of piece and think more people ...

Hey, This piece is so cynical . . . I LOVE IT! It is very dark, it shows love as evil. it's awesome. If people put things like Love isn't ...

Hey, I shall be your reviewer. The repetition of stanzas' doesn't have the effect you want. It just makes it annoying to read more than anything. You put a rhyme ...

Hey, I shall be your reviewer. Not to be negative to start with but where is the punctuation. A piece without punctuation is okay, but when it is this lengh ...

You promised the world at my feet, You promised you’ll always “be there”, & you said that you will always stay, Hold my hand as the weathers change. But when ...

Hey, I shall be your reviewer. The poem is, erm, difficult to read who be putting it nicely. You rhyming scheme is off completely. If you want it to rhyme ...

Hey, I shall be your reviewer today. When you realize That the one you love Is gone for good And then, Your breath escapes And you can't draw in anymore ...

Hey, I shall be your reviewer:D First things first. The rhyme. The rhyme in this piece makes it really hard to read and takes away from the actual feeling in ...

Hey, I shall be your reviewer:D Until the last paragraph, for me, it wasn't a romantic short story. It had to much of a dark feel, but the last paragraph ...

Hello, Firstly I liked the link between the first and last stanza, i always think that it's a nice touch. Secondly, this poem reminds of a poem called homecoming as ...

Hey, Excuse me whilst I vomit. :D What we have here, for me, is a standard love poem. It isn't the best, but it isn't the worst. It's hard to ...

Hey, I'm quite intrigued into what's going to happen next if I'm being honest. Let me know when you carry on. I liked it, it was very descriptive, and the ...