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"Warm and confident with the help of the beer can.this liquor made me better, no longer bashful." I think that you should start a new line with the second sentence. ...

Very cute poem. It's good to be able to read something light and humorous every once in a while. You used rhyming very well throughout the poem. I really liked ...

"It was “11:00PM,” according to the clock, when I got a message." I really don't think that the quotation marks are necessary. I personally found them to be rather off ...

I can kind of agree with some of things that you've said. I remember one of my first comments basically said that in order for it to be a good ...

When I read this I felt like I was missing something. Maybe I just don't understand. Maybe I just didn't pay enough attention to details or subtle hints. Maybe I ...

"All the smiling makes you sad All the giggling makes you mad." I feel like these lines would feel a bit less repetitive if you maybe said "all the giggling ...

I must first compliment you on your word choice. I really enjoyed the simile that you have used. "I bit into an apple, nectar pooled as I tore through green ...

This is beautiful. It's just sounds so wonderfully romantic and uses wonderful descriptive language. It has a wonderful fluency to it, and your word choice is excellent. On that note, ...

"Close Together." Sorry, i hate to start off with such a tiny nitpick, but that really got on my nerves. I don't think that the T should be capitalized. It ...

"I never thought I could change, But love knew I could." I think that you probably should put the word "that" in between the word "knew" and the word "I". ...

"it's been to long...." I think that here you meant too and not to. "but all I do stare..." I think that you shouldn't capitalize the I. Try to keep ...

Ah, being a writer. Such a blessing and a curse. Blessed with such a passion that is there whenever you need it most. Being able to convert large concepts and ...

I love how you so well incorporated happiness, yet still kept this poem realistic. Personally, if i were you i would still incorporate more sadness, maybe just by adding a ...

Can i please first say that i love this? I really do. It was beautifully written and conveyed a very clear message. I love how it really showed what some ...

I noticed that you put spaces before punctuation. I figured that this was a stylistic choice, but i still found it to be off-putting. Proofread your first sentence. I think ...