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Hi Tinkem! :) I think that this idea is really good! You should definitely keep writing it because I really want to see where you go with this! :) Also, ...

Hi Xiahou Zay! :) I really enjoyed this first chapter! I'm very interested to see where you're going with this story. However, I did see a few typos and confusing ...

Hi! :) Welcome to YWS (even though I joined the same day you did :)). I'm glad to be your first reviewer! I just have a few comments to help ...

So far, I really like the storyline. It's intriguing and different. Great job on that! :) I did see quite a bit of grammatical errors, though. You might want to ...

I think this is really good! I like the plot so far and the mystery that surrounds Caleb and Eva. Very nice! :) Though, it can definitely be improved. If ...

Good start to your novel! I like the whole idea of this! :) I just have a few little critiques to improve this a whole lot. She collapsed to where ...

Very nice! I love how you just threw us into action and yet I felt like I didn't miss a beat. This scene felt very realistic; I was very surprised ...

Very good! I like the way that you don't necessarily have to tell the readers what's going on; you're just showing us. :) You're also very good at adding suspense ...

Great job! You have wonderful rhythm here; the words just flow together. :) The only comment I have is that I enjoyed the verses more than I did the chorus. ...

Amazing job! I could literally hear it on the radio (I made up my own little tune that I pictured with the lyrics)! :) You're really good! If this were ...

Hi again! I decided to review this chapter as well since I reviewed the first. I like where this story is going and can't stand the suspense of what's going ...

First off, I just want you to know that I see a lot of potential in your writing. I love the storyline so far, and I must say that I ...

Absolutely love this! I especially enjoy the story that you're telling. There is a ton of emotion hidden in it that just makes the poem that much better. Your rhythm ...

I agree that it seems like you were so concerned with rhyming the words that you seemed to pay little attention to the overall story being told by using those ...

I love this! Again, you put a ton of emotion into this poem as I have noticed that you do with many of our other poems, and I really liked ...