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I.
Dear diary, I saw him today
He had this smile when he walked my way
His eyes rested on me for a while
But I didn't take my chance to say "hi"
Dear diary, I watched him leave
I never thought that he could make me believe
That this is love and I'm beginning to fall
But I know he'll never catch me at all
[chorus]
It was just an ordinary day
But there's a guy who took my breath away
After that, I knew that everyday will never be the same again
I've got a pen and I'll write it down
How time stops whenever he's around
I wish he could feel this magic I feel
Or hear this song I sing
As I write, dear diary
II.
Dear diary, he turned to me
And walked to where I sat under the tree
He hesitated and said,
"Well I just wondered--"
But then he shrugged and smiled and started walking away
Dear diary, I watched him leave
I never thought that he could make me believe
That this is love and I'm beginning to fall
But I know he'll never catch me at all
[chorus]
It was just an ordinary day
But there's a guy who took my breath away
After that, I knew that everyday will never be the same again
I've got a pen and I'll write it down
How time stops whenever he's around
I wish he could feel this magic I feel
Or hear this song I sing
As I write, dear diary
[bridge]
I've got a lot of things to tell him
But I'm not brave enough to speak them out
So just in case he won't be listening
I'll just take my time to write them down
[chorus]
Because it was such an ordinary day
But he's the one who took my breath away
And after that, I knew my everyday will never be the same again
I've got a pen and I'll write it down
How time stops whenever he's around
I wish he could feel this magic I feel
Or hear this song I sing
As I write, dear diary
I wish he could feel this magic I feel
Or hear this song I sing
As I write, dear diary
<3
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love this!
maybe you should leave out 'just' in the last sentence, because I think it would sound better..
but other than that: great song <3
wow I can't believe I'm the only one who didn't like this. I understand because your a teen and all that you felt that a song lyric like this would be such a great topic, and in some ways I suppose that is true. I, however, thought that it just dragged on a bit and it had that puppy love on the brink of stalker feel to it.
Also, when reading this I kept hearing the song "Dear Diary" from the band M2M in my head which also made it seem that perhaps you were trying to emulate in various ways. Then again you might not have ever heard of M2M, but still it seems like an idea that has already been done...no originality whatsoever.
Amazing job! I could literally hear it on the radio (I made up my own little tune that I pictured with the lyrics)! :) You're really good! If this were a poem I would say to consider revising
on the last chorus because it seemed a bit long, but considering that this is a song and not a poem, then it's fantastic! Keep writing! :)I love the sentimental feeling in this piece. Keep writing.
thanks for appreciating it.
it made my day.
Amazing. Simply. Amazing. (:
Love it! Great lyrics.
This is so well written
I love it! xxx
AMAZING!!! I love it, keep writing!
This is very cool. Me like.