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Hi! You gave me a review and I wanted to return the favor. You do a good job developing your theme and message, and I like your use of language. ...

Hi! You reviewed my poem and I wanted to return the favor. :) I like this. It seems to have good rhythm/flow/sound and no grammar problems. The third stanza is ...

Hey, welcome to YWS! :D This is definitely a good beginning, but it's obvious it's unfinished. It's too short for a first chapter and there are lots of spelling/grammar errors. ...

Welcome to YWS! This was good! I liked that it's a purely metaphorical story, kind of like The Metamorphosis . Nitpicks/Comments Her heart beat so frantically that it burst from ...

So... this is pretty fantastic. I don't normally review poetry because I don't write it and don't know what to say. But I like this quite a lot. uneaten and ...

Nitpicks/Comments San Michele was one place where I knew I could be alone early in the morning as all of the people, living and dead, were still asleep in the ...

Welcome to YWS! He’s walking alone and with a purpose . H e’s not upset in by his loneliness and in fact, he wouldn’t even use that word to describe ...

Hi! First of all, props for the interesting format. It's always fun to experiment. I've seen dialogue-only stories before. It can work. However, I'm not this functions as a short ...

Hi! I won't review this as a finished piece of writing, since you said it isn't. I will say I found it very interesting, and yes, you should keep going ...

Hi there! You have quite a few spelling errors here. Most of them would be fixed by spell-check. I try to soak it up, but there’s just too much. It's ...

Hey, this was really good. :D Nitpicks/Comments The street was wet, the infinite reflections of the infinite number of city lights diving into the depths of something with a striking ...

Hi! This was really good. Nitpicks He was with the most beautiful girl …you mean “she”? Her long black hair fell around her face, making it seem as if she ...

Nitpicks Well, here I am, 18 eighteen I generally spell out numbers unless their something like 2,776,569,209 or a date or time, etc. My mom would kill me if she ...

First of all, welcome to YWS! I only joined a few days ago, but let me know if you have questions or need reviews or a friend. :) This was ...

This was really good! Nitpicks watching the signal die away That seems like a strange way to describe a shooting star. knowing that the hideout of the leader, Jasmine, would ...