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Re: If I Die (Prologue)
Hello, MaskedDreams1. Miss Strongwill here to give you a review. I couldn’t believe that they did that. First that is unnecessary. It just distracts the reader. I stopped abruptly when ...
Aug 3, 2014 -
Re: Blood and Silver Ch. Ten
Hello again, DeepCrystal! Porcupine Strongwill here to give you a review. Here I go... We shall start with the technical errors, such as typos and stuff. NITPICKS “Do you have ...
Jul 27, 2014 -
Re: Bellum De Hominis Chapter 8- The A Team
Hello again, GeoCha! Porcupine Strongwill here for to give you a review. I am sorry if I pick on something crucial to the plot; I haven't read any of the ...
Jul 27, 2014 -
Re: The Tales of the Argonauts: the Osorezu and the Hana (10-1)
Good day, ulala8! Porcupine Strongwill again here for a review! Pardon if I haven't read any of the previous chapters, so please don't mind if I comment on something I ...
Jul 27, 2014 -
Re: Alone with the Sun -- Chapter 6
Good day, Purple29. Porcupine Strongwill again here for a review! NITPICKS “What the hell are you doing?” I screamed , holding the knife out in front of me like a ...
Jul 27, 2014 -
Re: Final Destination Chapter 11 (Edited)
Good day, Tiaradyson. Porcupine Strongwill here for a review. NITPICKS What else is he hiding? h e asks himself. Perhaps be consistent in italicizing thoughts. A golden plate with the ...
Jul 27, 2014 -
Re: The Reaper In Black -- Chapter Ten
Hello, Sherri. Porcupine Strongwill here for a review. I would be nitpicking and commenting as I go. Opening the door, expecting a sleeping boy and a cold, unwelcoming house, she ...
Jul 27, 2014 -
Re: Life after him chapter 4
Hullo, dawny96791. Porcupine Strongwill for a review. I'm sorry if I haven't read any previous chapters of this novel, so if I say anything irrelevant plot-wise, please don't mind it. ...
Jul 27, 2014 -
Re: Forgiveness
Hullo, Sabrina. Porcupine Strongwill here for a review. I will point out my nitpicks first: I didn't learn from mistakes and I only just followed in the footsteps of a ...
Jul 27, 2014 -
Re: Going through Time-Chapter Seven: We're Dying in Two Ways
hullo, wisegirl22. i believe we haven't met around the site before. allow me to introduce msyelf: hullo again, wisegirl22. i am Porcupine Strongwill, and i'm here to day to give ...
Jul 24, 2014 -
Re: An Essay on Society (from the perspective of a cat)
hullo, lapis! here to give you a review. technical errors Meow meow meow meow mew, meow me m o mi meow. this is the only typo. so off to my... ...
Jul 21, 2014 -
Re: Game On Level 1.3
hullo, Niraco. i've noticed that your work has been up for a few days but still doesn't have a review, so here i am to do just that. technical errors ...
Jul 21, 2014 -
Re: Uncertainty
hullo, MissAtomicBomb. here to review. technical errors "Mari, what are you smiling about?" m y sister asked, looking at me suspiciously. dialogue tags do not stand on their own; they ...
Jul 19, 2014 -
Re: I Want a Heart
hullo, IamTraunt. you shared the link, i came to review. technical errors People say it's a good thing . W ell, that I'm not too sure about. this is too ...
Jul 18, 2014 -
Re: The Night The Everything was Lost
hullo, purple29! i am porcey and am here today to take on the challenge of helping you. technical mistakes He stared at the gravel beneath his feet with such focus ...
Jul 18, 2014