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Re: If I Die (Prologue)
Hello, MaskedDreams1. Miss Strongwill here to give you a review. I couldn’t believe that they did that. First that is unnecessary. It just distracts the reader. I stopped abruptly when ...
Sun Aug 03, 2014 5:48 am -
Re: Blood and Silver Ch. Ten
Hello again, DeepCrystal! Porcupine Strongwill here to give you a review. Here I go... We shall start with the technical errors, such as typos and stuff. NITPICKS “Do you have ...
Sun Jul 27, 2014 1:03 pm -
Re: Bellum De Hominis Chapter 8- The A Team
Hello again, GeoCha! Porcupine Strongwill here for to give you a review. I am sorry if I pick on something crucial to the plot; I haven't read any of the ...
Sun Jul 27, 2014 12:43 pm -
Re: The Tales of the Argonauts: the Osorezu and the Hana (10-1)
Good day, ulala8! Porcupine Strongwill again here for a review! Pardon if I haven't read any of the previous chapters, so please don't mind if I comment on something I ...
Sun Jul 27, 2014 8:05 am -
Re: Alone with the Sun -- Chapter 6
Good day, Purple29. Porcupine Strongwill again here for a review! NITPICKS “What the hell are you doing?” I screamed , holding the knife out in front of me like a ...
Sun Jul 27, 2014 7:50 am -
Re: Final Destination Chapter 11 (Edited)
Good day, Tiaradyson. Porcupine Strongwill here for a review. NITPICKS What else is he hiding? h e asks himself. Perhaps be consistent in italicizing thoughts. A golden plate with the ...
Sun Jul 27, 2014 7:34 am -
Re: The Reaper In Black -- Chapter Ten
Hello, Sherri. Porcupine Strongwill here for a review. I would be nitpicking and commenting as I go. Opening the door, expecting a sleeping boy and a cold, unwelcoming house, she ...
Sun Jul 27, 2014 7:17 am -
Re: Life after him chapter 4
Hullo, dawny96791. Porcupine Strongwill for a review. I'm sorry if I haven't read any previous chapters of this novel, so if I say anything irrelevant plot-wise, please don't mind it. ...
Sun Jul 27, 2014 6:50 am -
Re: Forgiveness
Hullo, Sabrina. Porcupine Strongwill here for a review. I will point out my nitpicks first: I didn't learn from mistakes and I only just followed in the footsteps of a ...
Sun Jul 27, 2014 6:15 am -
Re: Going through Time-Chapter Seven: We're Dying in Two Ways
hullo, wisegirl22. i believe we haven't met around the site before. allow me to introduce msyelf: hullo again, wisegirl22. i am Porcupine Strongwill, and i'm here to day to give ...
Thu Jul 24, 2014 2:50 am -
Re: An Essay on Society (from the perspective of a cat)
hullo, lapis! here to give you a review. technical errors Meow meow meow meow mew, meow me m o mi meow. this is the only typo. so off to my... ...
Mon Jul 21, 2014 11:22 am -
Re: Game On Level 1.3
hullo, Niraco. i've noticed that your work has been up for a few days but still doesn't have a review, so here i am to do just that. technical errors ...
Mon Jul 21, 2014 11:10 am -
Re: Uncertainty
hullo, MissAtomicBomb. here to review. technical errors "Mari, what are you smiling about?" m y sister asked, looking at me suspiciously. dialogue tags do not stand on their own; they ...
Sat Jul 19, 2014 2:44 am -
Re: I Want a Heart
hullo, IamTraunt. you shared the link, i came to review. technical errors People say it's a good thing . W ell, that I'm not too sure about. this is too ...
Fri Jul 18, 2014 4:29 pm -
Re: The Night The Everything was Lost
hullo, purple29! i am porcey and am here today to take on the challenge of helping you. technical mistakes He stared at the gravel beneath his feet with such focus ...
Fri Jul 18, 2014 5:36 am