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  • Poetry » General, General Re: A History of Nuclear Genocide

    Thank you so much for the review. And "part": I can't believe I missed that.

    Aug 12, 2013
  • Poetry » General, General Re: A History of Nuclear Genocide

    Thank you for the review. You're right on the semicolon, thank you.

    Aug 12, 2013
  • Poetry » General, General Re: QED

    ...

    May 27, 2013
  • Poetry » General, Romantic Re: Siberian Nights

    I think she champions death. I don't think she holds on to the death of champions.

    Feb 9, 2013
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Prophecy Bottle

    The "were" is definitely vernacular. Thanks for the review!

    Feb 8, 2013
  • Poetry » Romantic, Lyrical Re: She Is

    Not a review but the line "Skin like freckled porcelain" is awesome.

    Feb 5, 2013
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Spilling

    So this isn't a review but . . . I've read this twice. Once when it said nanometers and once when it said branches. Branches and beaks and blue birds. ...

    Feb 5, 2013
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Sink-901b

    Hey Thank You for the review. And yes you're right it was a girl who had drowned. As for the setting . . . I met the family on the ...

    Jan 19, 2013
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Sink-901b

    Right? Like how much more disjointed could this really be? Ha no just playing but thank you for the review. It is disjointed. I was feeling pretty "disjointed" at the ...

    Jan 17, 2013
  • Poetry » Realistic, Dramatic Re: Poem 1

    You could almost do away with it but I think it's important. There's a transition before you realize you're holding meat. something happens.

    Jan 5, 2013
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Black Ice and Starry Skies

    Thank You! The punctuation comes from a technical accident/medical report. There was a rhythm to this report at least, and I thought I should fill in the gaps with more ...

    Jan 5, 2013
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Black Ice and Starry Skies

    Thanks!

    Jan 5, 2013
  • Poetry » Other, Lyrical Re: I was your secret, wasn't I, you darkness

    "Firstly, the basic layout out of the poem." There is no predicate here. "Also it is poorly punctuated, I know these things does not matter much when we are writing ...

    Dec 17, 2012
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Hold Your Breath

    Thank You

    Nov 9, 2012
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Hold Your Breath

    Thank You

    Nov 9, 2012


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