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Peanut here! I haven't seen you around YWS much... because you are a new member xD! Welcome to your 2nd home! The old man awoke with a small gasp. I ...

Hi! I'm here to review... quite a bit after I said I would. :oops: sorry about that. he said not unkindly. There should be a comma after 'said'. Hmm... I ...

If...you can call what we had "friendship" that is. I bit of an awkward sentence... try rearranging the wording a little. What does it matter at this point what I ...

Hey! I'm Peanut- I don't think I have ever critiqued you before! Well, there is a first time for everything :) Posted: Mon Apr 13, 2009 4:11 am Post subject: ...

Hmm... this poem seemed a little... what is the word?... flat. You start the same way each time (which I know is your main point, but it seems a little ...

Then the clanking of each metal bar. I would get rid of the 'then' at the beginning of that sentence :) A gentle fog approaches, But you keep walking. Even ...

Peanut here to review! *giggle Carry me, rock me, Surround me, kiss me, Like bittersweet melodies swirling amidst me. Personally, I think there are too many 'me's in there. :lol: ...

Peanut here to review! A siren's song could be heard for miles, Her sweet, sweet chords -- Her seductive style. Pitches held high are so pure and lifting, She changed ...

first foo, remember to capitalize your I's! I haven't even read this yet and I noticed almost none of your I's were capitalized... something we like to do here at ...

Peanut here! :D Tied up so tightly In a ball of self protection Rolled up so tensely In a wall of self destruction. I don't know what it is about ...

Hello! I'm peanut, here to review your piece on my daily reviewing- spree ;) It’s like I’ve been awakened and the world is falling down. If you are using figurative ...

Hey new member! I'm Peanut, here to review this for you! My Dear Carol, We both knew the day would come when I would pass along a little of myself ...

Peanut here to review! Ooh, I like how this poem ends... it has a nice flow, and good creativity. Nice :D Emotions ensnare your soul; Words captivate you. Yes, they ...

Hi! Peanut here... To me, this poems line breaks are off, which are interrupting the rhythm. You have very interesting choice of line breaks, and I wonder how you decided ...

It's quiet here. I don't like the silence. Where there's no sound there's no life. I'm tired... Of singing to myself, Finding comfort in my own words And endlessly drying ...