Published April 10, 2009
Every word he writes,
Pulsates with life;
Every line on paper,
A grand masterpiece.
Dramatic,
Tear-jerking, gut-wrenching
Monologues tie heartstrings,
Emotions ensnare your soul;
Words captivate you.
Comic indeed,
Overwhelming joy,
Foolish joy;
Mere words capture smiles
And inject it into our systems.
Tragic though;
His words breathe,
His lines dance across minds,
Flirt and whisper to hearts
And love.
They live.
But who lived to write these words?
The writer.
Who?
The writer.
Who?
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Hello! Katie here, and I'm going to give you a really quick review
First of all, I have no nitpicks~! No, seriously. I have none. I just want you to know I loved this stanza:
And you're from the Philippines? Noypi din ako, pare. (I'm also a Filipino). I'm pleased to meet you!
Soooo there. I'll make a complete review about this as soon as I can. I'm just really tired right now...
Have a nice day!
Thanks to those who reviewed. This is a different for me I hardly write free verse and I'm rather apprehensive about it. Anyone else care to help with this piece?
Peanut here to review!
Ooh, I like how this poem ends... it has a nice flow, and good creativity. Nice
Yes, they do!
The 'they live' part sort of messes with the fluency...
Questions aren't normally a great way to go, but in this case, it leads up to your awesome ending, so it's okay
Nice work! I love how descriptive you were... basically just minor fix-ups. Again, great job!
Ooh, nice. Pretty cool poem, and mysterious too. I don't if you were aiming for that too but I thought it was. Okay, first things first. The word usage. Awesome descriptive and vivid words. For example:
Nice job on this poem. Oh, I forgot to mention, the title is cool too. 
Every word he writes, <---- This is where I thought it was mysterious
Pulsates with life; <----- That word brings life into this stance.
Every line on paper,
A grand masterpiece. <----- Now that really catched my attention.
And:
Dramatic,
Tear-jerking, gut-wrenching <----- Cool word choices
Monologues tie heartstrings,
Emotions ensnare your soul; <----- There's something about that in the middle that really
Words captivate you.
catches your attention.
Those were some of the things at the beginning that I really liked. Then, of course, at the end. Wow, that was an awesome ending. I thought it was sort of like a cliffhanger asking a question yet more mysterious. It got me thinking too.