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Angel, this story was brilliant. You really developed the characters well. I could feel the emotion as I read it. You showed how alcohol can effect people and their relationships ...

Hey Rascalover, these were the few comma mistakes I found. There may be more, I'm not sure. “No , Jay, I would love to talk to you though. What the ...

Hey Emma. This was very good. The description was wonderful, but I have one question. At the beginning they were running around a pool in the courtyard, yes? Well then ...

Hey Cat I didn't know you were writing more. I'm glad you did. The dialogue was very believable. I could tell you used the way our school is with the ...

Oh my gosh, Meep this was hilarious! I love Harry Potter and like Twilight. But I'm not a big fan of Bella in the book. This was my favorite part ...

Hey Ashleigh I'm Peanut. My critiques are in bold. It was that cold unforgettable winter’s day that I will never forget. If its unforgettable we know you won't forget it. ...

Hey Rose. Um, do you usually write in 1st person? Because I saw some places where you switched from 3rd to 1st. For example: She couldn’t remember how long I ...

Hey Bear-y! I read this story while my computer loaded the picture at the bottom. When I got there and saw the funny llama I was really surprised. Its cool ...

Hey Jare! I can't give you a proper review right now because my computer is only showing half of the story on this review post page thing. But according to ...

This was a good was a little Harry Potter-ish but I can't wait to see what you do with it. One thing I saw was that Arianna gasped when Alex ...

Hey, Cat! I just went ahead and copied the whole part. Its just easier that way, but I may not mess with a lot of it. So here I go, ...

This was good. For something that just came to you and that you didn't really think about. The one thing I want to know is are the voices he heard ...

That was real good, even if it was just a draft. I'm not going to go into specifics but one thing I noticed is that the diary entry at the ...

Hi, Helen I'm Peanut. For some one who doesn't normally write fiction this was really good.There really wasn't much wrong with it. The car journey was long and awkward. George ...

Hi Kevzta, I'm Peanut and I'm going to apologize now for what I'm about to do. Sorry. My critiques are bold. I heaved the yellow bag what is in the ...