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Hi, Dracula. I just reviewed "The Yellow Hen cafe". The World's Bank is once again a warm, cheerful place. You really have a vivid imagination and a knack for describing ...

Hi, Rosette. I can tell you honestly say that I don't share your absolute love of mayo. Especially when it comes in a jar. You should try whipping it together ...

Hi, Dracula. I was hungry after reading this. It was very well-written. The descriptions were very good. I really want to visit the Yellow Hen Cafe. I didn't especially expect ...

Hi, Ryan. I agree with PrincessInk. It was a creepy prologue. I'm not sure exactly what your protagonist went through and where but I'm sort of glad you wrote it ...

I liked this. It made me think a great deal. It made me worry. It made me smile too, because I have a lot of hopes for your protagonist's (or ...

Hi, JumpyDot. Talk about well as edifying, of course. It was very short. More of a fable than a short story, actually. I have only two small issues. The first ...

Hi, Homachi. I was also surprised by the sharp turns you took. You were telling us of a normal morning and, then, bang, it was a weird horror story. I ...

Hi, Myjaspercat. It was an interesting first part. I found it maybe a little too short. But I understand it's the way you mean to go. It was believable and ...

Hi, Dracula. I agree with other reviewers that it was very sweet. There can never be enough written on the subject of a big sister's love for her younger siblings. ...

Hi, Carlito. I deduced from the title that you had two main protagonists, Liz and Zac. I wasn't sure if this chapter was from the boy or the girl's POV ...

Hi, it was odd to read a story written in the second person like that. It was well-written, no problem. Just odd. It's strange that you tagged it a Science ...

Hi, Dragongirl. I more than laughed, I really liked this shortstory. It was cute and fantastic and well-written. There are several typos. I'm not sure I caught them all. « I ...

Hi, Beccalicious. Other another rather depressing piece on the couple. It almost read like a poem. Bitter-sweet atmosphere. Nice imagery. I regretted that you didn't explain the significance of the ...

Hi, I agree with PrincessInk that it sounded more like an essay than like a shortstory. Not enough narrative. I liked the "4 walls" refrain. It comes back all through ...

Hi, Dest. First of all, there are a couple of grammatical mistakes. They made reading this first chapter more difficult. However, other reviewers did a thorough job of pointing them ...