Hey there Dracula. It's just lizzy dropping by real quick, so without a further ado, let the reviewing begin.
1. Sorry it took me a bit to get here, I was busy with exams for the past few months. The picture at the end threw me off a bit but I guess that was just to relate it back into the story, I didn't get much from it. It just seemed like a forced addition that you were putting there because you felt like people needed to know what dyed flowers looked like. If it holds some deeper meaning, please inform me of such.
2. The story took a twist that I didn't think it was going to take (which was a nice twist btw) and had a rather calm resolution. It just didn't seem like it was going to cool down that quickly, like there would have been more discussion between the main character and her boss. Maybe that's just how I loom at these matters but the light hinting of a tragic backstory, don't really catch my attention. Everyone has a somewhat tragic backstory that drove them to be here but I do get the feeling she's raising her sister by herself or something. That's about the only dark perspective that I'm getting out of this.
3. You might want to move the language rating up a little bit since you do use a form of 'bitch' twice. Even though I don't really mind it (and it's barely a swear word), rules are rules so. There was one particular line in this entire story that I just loved because it was just sitting in the middle of chaos and it was about peace itself.
Dying flowers is oddly therapeutic.
This struck me hard because it just seemed like this one sentence was able to balance out all of the other crap going on in the story. Very powerful and very well done. And that's how the whole story was to me, a mixture of really vibrant but rare details, buffered by plain and filled with dread ones. Not going to complain about the balance because I like it.
Well that's all for now.
Good day.
Lady Lizz
Points: 650
Reviews: 766
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