paintingtherain97

I loved all of these. Definitely great for a first attempt. You should have seen mine. They were laughable. But, then again, I was in seventh grade. Anyway, my favorite ...

I thought this was great. Your use of puncuation...well... punctuated the meaning of the words, if you know what I mean. I know you probably don't want to hear this ...

I like this. I thought it was nice, in a cutesy Hallmark-ish way. But it was a bit redundant at times. You say "just like" a lot, so I suggest ...

First, I'd like to say that I love the title. It really drew me in, I think because it sounds so fantastical. Second, I'd like to say that you really ...

This is really good. I like the name. It kind of draws you in. You know it's going to be depressing, but you read it the way you stare at ...

I love this! I like the way you stated everything that happened so matter-of-factly and made the professor such a lovable dumbass. The ending was pretty unexpected, since he always ...

Ok, this is good, but I have some suggestions if you maybe want to build on it. First, I liked how you start with the nicknames. It was a good ...

This is good! Not only is it organized and well-written, but it's also about a topic that actually matters. It doesn't sound pretentious like a lot of 9-11 things do. ...

This is pretty good. There are a few basic errors in grammar, with some mispelled words and run-on sentences. You can probably catch them if you read it over again. ...

This is good. I like the way you captured a lot of feeling, while still using a basic rhyme scheme. You might want to check your spelling; I found a ...

This is an emotional topic, and you summed it up well. I like the way that you included both the heroes and victims who died and those who survived. I ...

This is good! It's simple and to-the-point, but it still has the full emotion and meaning of a more complex poem. The rhymes are great, like perfect. The syllabic balance ...

This is really good. It's not often that you see acrostic poems on the Young Writers Society website. Usually, acrostics are shallow, simple-minded, but this one has meaning. The theme ...

First off, you seem to be a good writer. And, since you say this is a school assignment, I'll be straightforward. Things to improve: a few run-on sentences you should ...

This is really good! It's the sort of thing that I try to write, but better. So basically, the only real problems that I see are inconsistancies in tenses and ...