oneeyedunicornhunter

okay, good, you fixed the chatspeak. i personally have nothing against it, it's just that the rules require it. this was mildly funny, but not what i'd call "hilarious". the ...

i think the line breaks were choppy. you could definitely improve the flow just by changing that. as for the poem, i didn't really relate to much of it. the ...

wow...this poem was so boring, i found it hard to read the whole thing. please learn to write before you post again. haha, just kiddin'. this was pretty good, really ...

well. just goes to show: there's always someone who has it worse than you do. i don't have any experience in this department (fortunately!), but perhaps if you told a ...

your icon is barfing up a rainbow. :shock: my life will never be the same. as for the poem, i liked being forced to imagine having to kill someone i ...

umm...what? that poem was like eating american cheese with red wine--it just didn't make sense. i'm proud of that analogy. 8) anyway, this could be a cool poem. just...expand. and..*yawn*...try ...

yeah, everything was covered before. it's childish, but childhood is important! childhood is the best part of life. everything is a mystery, learning is easy and fun, there are no ...

wow. this was so awesome, i don't even want to critique it. really, the story was engrossing, the rythm was sound even when you deviated from the rhyme scheme, and ...

for once i have to agree with vernon. you don't have punctuation! :lol: other than that, i completely disagree. this wasn't anything extraordinarily original, but it was good. here's a ...

really cool poem. didn't really understand the second part: "Crimson ice Frozen like tear-spears (is this 'tear' as in 'rip' or 'tear' as in " :'( "?) Waiting for heat ...

good poem. nothing too deep, really just an expression of strong feelings, which is fine of course. i wasn't blown away, but this really was good. it would have been ...

Awww. That was sad. :smt010 If I see him, I would be gladly to smile. I don't really care how someone looks. If they're nice to me, I will talk ...

haven't attempted a sonnet in at least a year...very hard. you're rhyming wasn't perfect, but that's really in my opinion the least important part of a poem. just part of ...

very cool poem...it's rare that something like this flows, but it did. very well, i might add. not quite sure what you were saying with it, though. as for it ...

well...this was interesting, but there was nothing here that made me want to slow down and think about what you meant...still, this was good. i wasn't crazy about the ending. ...