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Before I get to my crit, let me welcome you to YWS. "It rocks my face off!" I can tell that you're trying, but, it's really bland and plain. It ...

Mmmmmm ... symbolism cooling in the window ... I liked this a lot, but I think you should edit and fix the the typos. Iroy=Iron? Ivory? Tyranosaurus Rex? Trees are ...

Wow. That was really good ... The only thing I have a problem with is the last line. It sounds more like an ending to an essay than a poem. ...

This was actually really, good. I say "actually," because I'm sure that someone's going to be totally phased by line six. But, that line may actually be a little too ...

This was pretty well written well written. It didn't really particularly hit me in the face with wowness, if you know what I mean. But I got the statement. The ...

I'll be looking forward to reading the next part to this. You should describe the cannon. Just since most people don't see a cannon everyday, and that's her favorite place ...

I liked it. I think it could be better, but I liked it. The second sentence in the second paragraph is really messed up. I think it needs to be ...

Me like! Me like lots! I was well said, just like someone real would say or think it. Just one thing, though. When she talks about the beer, the second ...

This isn't bad for a "try." It really wasn't bad at all. In the dialogue, especially near and at the end, I think it went a little to fast. I ...

I thought this was very good. In the second line, "gently" should be "gentle", shouldn't it? Also, in the fourth stanza, that "then", should be "than". The fifth stanza, in ...

mmh... Interesting. I probably could have understood it a whole lot better had I known anything about computers (if this poem has anything to do about computers ... How stupid ...

I liked it, but, the writing could have been a little slower. It kind of seemed like it was like, "Oh, look, an angel, how ordinary. Oh, look they keep ...

I liked the message. Many here are going to tell you that rhyme schemes suck. But, in this one, the rhyming didn't seem forced at all, except for in a ...

Whenever I have to write "I am" poems or "I am from" peoms, it completely bores me, anoys me, and turns me off to poetry. But this one was surprisingly ...

Yeah...WELCOME!!!!!!! Hey, niteowl, it's not fair that everyone else didn't get the new elephant emoticon!!! You should give everyone else one, too. Anyway, this was a good poem, and yes, ...