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  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Humor
    Re: The Chosen Grandma, Chapter 9.1

    Hello! Yes, Theobald is back! And saving people plus being awesome at the same time. Anyway, on to the review. Firstly, Edna is a fricking badass running through the smoke ...

    Jul 30, 2017

  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Humor
    Re: The Chosen Grandma, Chapter 8.2

    Hello! To start with, I love the insults that Edna says about Methodius, they are so true to what Edna has said before and they were funny. There was also ...

    Jul 30, 2017

  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Humor
    Re: The Chosen Grandma, Chapter 8.1

    Hello! Okay, I think this was a good chapter but I think it could maybe have done with more tension when Edna's following the girl. I think we lose the ...

    Jul 24, 2017

  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Humor
    Re: The Chosen Grandma, Chapter 7.2

    Hello! I'm sorry it's been like 8 weeks since I did a review on your story but I'm a lazy bum. I will go in order of what I noticed. ...

    Jul 19, 2017

  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Dramatic
    Re: Que Sera Sera Chapter 8

    Hello again! I hope I can keep up with this story again but you do make it pretty easy once I start reading again :D I noticed someone said about ...

    Jun 16, 2017

  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Dramatic
    Re: Que Sera Sera Chapter 7

    Hello! Okay, I know I'm really late with this review but I'm trying to get my act together again. I'm going to try and review the other chapters after this ...

    Jun 16, 2017

  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Dramatic
    Re: Que Sera Sera Chapter 6

    Hello again! Okay, the first thing I wanted to say is that I think "Corpse" and "Body" are too harsh when referring to Dragon especially when used in dialogue. I ...

    May 26, 2017

  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Dramatic
    Re: Que Sera Sera Chapter 5

    Hello again! I know this is already out of the green room but I didn't want to move onto the next chapter without reviewing this one first. Sorry, it took ...

    May 26, 2017

  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Humor
    Re: The Chosen Grandma, Chapter 7.1

    Hello BlueAfrica, I'm sorry this took so long again, it was a busy week and I was very tired the past couple of nights. Anyway, on to the review! I ...

    May 22, 2017

  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Dramatic
    Re: Que Sera Sera Chapter 4

    Hello again! This is definitely the best chapter by far, I really enjoyed it, most of negative is more nitpicking than actually work. The first part was exciting, you described ...

    May 19, 2017

  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Action / Adventure
    Re: Ashura: A World of Sword and Magic Chapter 11

    Hello again! Sorry, this took me so long to review, I have been very busy with work and keeping up with my own writing. I'll try to get to it ...

    May 19, 2017

  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Dramatic
    Re: Que Sera Sera Chapter 3

    Hello again! Okay, I'm guessing you don't live in England or don't know much about the police force because officers in England don't carry guns and if they do it's ...

    May 17, 2017

  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Dramatic
    Re: Que Sera Sera Chapter 2

    Hello again! Okay first thing I noticed was that this is hugely telling and not much showing. I'm linking this just case you don't know what I'm talking about. You ...

    May 15, 2017

  • Other » Supernatural, Teen Fiction
    Re: There's So Much More To Juno Moon: blurb

    Hello! I haven't read any of the chapters for this but I do like the concept and I should be able to give a good review without. The first thing ...

    May 14, 2017

  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Humor
    Re: The Chosen Grandma, Chapter 6.2

    Hello again! I'm sorry this took me so long to get to, I promise I'll be quicker next time :) Positives- I love Edna's interactions with Mittens, and I equally ...

    May 12, 2017


I’d heard he had started a fistfight in one of the seedier local taverns because someone had insisted on saying the word “utilize” instead of “use".
— Patrick Rothfuss, A Wise Man's Fear