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An interesting chapter. I like how it introduces some more information about the time watch. It helps open up more probabilities for the plot. I would of preferred a longer ...

Not to bad. The first poem and the third poem are the better ones. The second poem doesn't flow too well as ending a line with and or an incomplete ...

It's a bit short and it would of been easier to read if it was broken into paragraphs. I couldn't get a feel of the song so it might be ...

Astounding imagery, I can really picture the scene. What I read out of this is a King who feels that he is trapped by his responsibility to his people. I ...

Something funny and light. Not the best piece of work as it isn't as well structured as a normal story. It is also a bit short, but I guess that's ...

I enjoyed the scientific pointers you added in your essay. They show that both science and religion can live under the same roof. In terms of shortening. As an outspoken, ...

I'd say this poem is about the feeling of betrayal that someone who was murdered is feeling. The story is there, though there are a few problems. Can I ever ...

Quite an interesting story here. I haven't read the other chapters yet, but I'm sure to now. A good use of words, and a development in plot. The story is ...

Tear it apart and correct it? What corrections. It's perfectly awesome in my opinion.I close my eyes and wait for sleep, but it dances beyond my grasp. Any dream will ...

I get the gist of this song. In the beginning you can't really get the feel for it, so maybe a bit of an intro if you ever plan to ...

Not too bad of a poem, though the flow could be better. Here are a few nitpicks. So we try too hard to understand. That we've wasted lives by the ...

A nice poem. I see the story line there. Don't worry about 'throes' as it has multiple meanings that someone (AmelliaCogin) forgot about. The flow is good, same with the ...

A beautiful poem with a sad touch in the story. I like your non-cheesy rhyming and your alternation between quadrants and couplets. It give the poem a nice feel. The ...

Definitely a lesson learned in that poem, but sees should be used instead of see's. Other than that, a good poem. I hope you win/won that contest. As well all ...