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Re: solid liquid gas plasma (part three of "depression")
Hey I am Noelani. I hope you don't find these review offensive. I see that in your poem you are trying to explain who you are, but I don't understand ...
Nov 6, 2017 -
Re: Weed Out.
Hey, I'm Noelani ,and I hope you don't find this review offensive.Well your poem is definitely very short.You also have flow errors. In your poem you don't have a point ...
Nov 6, 2017 -
Re: Handcuffed (edited)
Hey, I'm Noelani, and I hope you don't find this review offensive. The first error that I notice is, even before I read your poem, is the fact that your ...
Nov 4, 2017 -
Re: Time Passes By
Hey, my name is Noelani, and I hope you don't find this review offensive. First things first you have punctuation errors as well as flow errors. I get that your ...
Nov 4, 2017 -
Re: Dear mama...
Hey, my name is Noelani, and I hope you don't find this review to be offensive. Well to go ahead and tell you the bads news first you have a ...
Nov 4, 2017 -
Re: my life.
Hey, my name is Noelani, and I hope you don't find this review offensive. To tell you the bad news first is you have punctuation errors, more so at the ...
Nov 3, 2017 -
Re: lost my home, lost myself in the gaps between his fingers.
Hey, I'm Noelani, and I hope you don't find this review offensive. First of all you have capitalization errors as well spelling as well as spelling mistakes. Second of all ...
Nov 2, 2017 -
Re: woodpecker (part two of "depression")
Hey, my name is Noelani, and I hope you don't find this review offensive. Well, to tell you the bad news first, you don't have capitalization in your poem.Also I ...
Nov 1, 2017 -
Re: Invisible
Hey, I'm Noelani, and I hope you don't find this review offensive.Well.............. UMMMM... very funny. (Not really, I couldn't see any words so I assumed that my WiFi wasn't working ...
Nov 1, 2017 -
Re: walking into the road
Hey, my name is Noelani, and I hope you don't find this review offensive. I really enjoyed your poem and I find it more spiritual than cultural. To tell the ...
Oct 31, 2017 -
Re: two of you
Hey, I'm Noelani, and hope you don't find this review offensive.You have declined the capitalize words (such as I). The flow of the paragraph is blinding, there's an up and ...
Oct 31, 2017 -
Re: Deleted 89
Hey, I'm Noelani, and I hope you don't find this review offense. I like the flow of your writing, but I don't really understand what it means or the propose ...
Oct 31, 2017 -
Re: The Star
Hey, my name is Noelani, I hope you don't find this review your story I feel that there should be more written, unless it's a mystery.If so than it's just ...
Oct 31, 2017 -
Re: Death by pizza
Hey I'm Noelani ,and I hope you don't find my review offensive. Okay well the story is weirdly written.I don't understand if it's a patriot telling the story or an ...
Oct 31, 2017