nickelpickle

I really appreciate your suggestions... I tried to revise this to the best of my ability... Please help me with it:) A storm is a powerful beast, Creating havoc and ...

welcome greenmonkey! Thanks for the complument... Incandescence- It was just some haiku's I did for school...I know it wasn't that great. Thank you for your comments:)

many thx for the comments...the only problem is...i havent decided what happens, so i cant write more... nikki

Brian, I don't really see quite what you are asking me or telling me. Nicole

Once again, thx for the comments! I really thought that even though the topic has been used, I wrote a different type of poem on it.

Many thx for the comments...I tried to rewrite, lmk what you think... Greed is a goblin That takes over us, Leading us away from honesty And hard work And into ...

good topic in my opinion, but try not to take on such a "preaching" tone (someone else said that too) and maybe make it a little bit shorter. It was ...

I also read this book and I really, really liked it. As a word of advice, her other books were also really good, so do read them:) It was a ...

I think that you captured the pressure of the moment very well, but like Brian I sort of lost you at some points....I think that the italics were speech for ...

Very..erm..interesting...I think that it is well written and I dont have any real critiscim (sorry but it was good!). Oh...one more thing...even though it was good, I wont be bathing ...

Very, very good...You created a great atmosphere and appealed to your reader:) Nikki

Thanks! Please read my other poems too! Nikki

I usually don't go for Vampire Stories and the like, but I really liked this one. Your story was written exceptionally well and your sentence variation and action was good. ...