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To continue... “Some people are destined to fight at some point during their lives. You must be one of these people why else would you have learnt this stuff? I ...

Kassa’s eyes opened slowly, she looked to her right and saw Jok sitting opposite her watching her quietly. When he saw she was awake he reached down into a bag ...

awesome..absolutely amazing.. i loved the flow and imagry of the poem....Nothing to critique, good job!

hmm...i liked it...i think...no.. I did, really.. I would like it even more if you seperated it into interest began to waver... Anyway, good job, keep writing!

this flowed very nicely... I liked it, but you def. need punctuation.. you lose your reader without it... I did like it a lot though:) -Nicole BTW. Your poetry is ...

omg...this was amazing...make a few correctoins and it will be great,...i pray that this didn't actually happen to you...if it did, i am so teribbly sorry..

personaly not one of my favorite types of was good for what it was though...

One word...Wow... This just left me...speechless...i loved it! You are an awesome writer and use a ton of emotion...awesome job

hm...This was not particularly my style, so for me the interest level was a bit low. I really love your writing style though and your description was awesome! Keep writing!

Many tears make the pool The pool of insanity The repetition just didn't workhere... Eh...I didn't really like it... I wanted to, but I didn't...

eh..soso..I appreciate the personification, but honestly, when does blood sigh It was okay, not one of your best...

Veru powerful poem..Besidese changing it to black I can't really think of anything. Great Job!

didnt like it...too many other poems on it, try song writing (you are really good at it!)

actualy it had more but my teacher made me take it out to meet the word limit

All I can say is wow! I loved this. Short amd to the point, lots of meaning. Perfection:)