Young Writers Society

This is a really nice poem. I can see in my head all the things you are describing and I went back to read it again once I was done. I really like the way you integrated fantasy with reality in a way that is easily understood. Keep up the good work, as the old cliche goes.

ashlyn

A bit short but you shared all that you need to in order to makes poem stand out.
Ive a read a few poems regarding dreams and I must say you this one is one of the best.
Great work and keep writing!
-Dawn

pretty and simple in its point. but while it sounds wonderful the idea/subject seems a litle used.

Soppy. This just dripped with immature strains of a romantic author. Of course, they're quite popular, but I don't like them. Oh well, maybe that's why I'll never be famous.

All I can say is wow! I loved this. Short amd to the point, lots of meaning. Perfection:)

That was beautiful.

But what is more rewarding,
then traveling from who you are
to who you can become?

weee! That was awesome Dreami!

okay, I editied it, thanks for suggestions!

dreami, evry1 has gotta luv this!

just 1 suggestion i can think of offhand...

But what is more rewarding,
then traveling from who you are

Niiice. I LOVE it when people write abot dreams. I've always had a fascination with them...

Few suggestions (keep in mind that I'm a bad poet critic):

The mist rose at midnight,
gathering, turning into a shape.

A man could be faintly seen.

The man faded into darkness,

but the impression was left,

So no one would forget.

The dream still mingled in the air,

wow, thanks for the great comments At first I really didn't think it was that great, but I liked it more and more as I read it

I agree with Skye Demon...this poem was beautiful. The ending was what really caught me and had me thinking, "WOW." I really liked this one, though.
*Sigh* Why can't I write like this?

This is beautiful; I absolutely love it!

But what is more rewarding,
then traveling from who you are
to who you can become?