nickelpickle

*faints* Sam, how the heck do you write so well? You are amazing and this is my favorite yet.

italics would've cleared up any questions i had....amazing, as usual

omg...you're gonna keep me up all night reading this story sam....i agree, death is a neccessity in this story...continue the good work

amazing, Sam...yes, I know this is ancient, but I had to start at the beginning....kept me reading

Areida, this was truly amazing. It was one of the few pieces of fiction that has literally brought me to tears. You did an excellent job on this and I ...

that post is extremely confusing All of his are and he ignores everyone when they try to tell him that... Anyway, excellent as your work always is.... Very emotional, excellent ...

oh my god areida....that was amazing....you are amazing at emotions.... i felt the emotion and love the point of view you wrote it on...i think you could easily get it ...

Show dont tell...put us in the mind of the person being portrayed....capture more emotion... you started well, you just need to expand on it. It def. shows the injustice and ...

Okay, I think Griffinkeeper got all the grammar. You wrote this very, very well but it felt like a piece of flash fiction to me. Write a prologue to it ...

guyz...this is really, really, really was horrible...I have some better stuff that isn't posted, but my only real poem that comes close to decency is called broken souls.... *shakes head ...

Sorry...pushed the wrong continue: Going through the wreckage Finding lost memories Now this is the end Of my lost story I go through the wreckage Seeking memories lost Add two ...

Nikki, not nickelpickle. Please. I simply criticize as much as I would want to hear. I would be happy to look at your other poem

Wow. Niteowl, I thought that this was one of your best. An excellent message, perfect flow and great description. Keep writing!

Unbelievably, I didn't catch the politics on the first run through of it. I dont agree with a ton of it, but the book had me in hysterical laughter. I ...

My apologies... In America...no, I won't gget started....Its just a difference, sorry