mystogan

oh that is fine, tell me when you finish and I will get to it

on both occasions you beat me, I was out for two days straight, so there was no way for me to review first. Enjoy this for as long as you ...

I am confused as to what is happening here. I feel like I have read this before. I feel like this is too short as well. Plus if this is ...

oh lol I didn't mean to reference a gender specifically at all, I just wrote that in the flow of it, but I will keep that in mind

Oh and you are misusing the stars. They are there to show when there has been a change of scene. Initially it is just different people on the same sofa, ...

and I forgot to say, kudos on the cliff hanger ending. It definitely spices things up. Once again I suspect Cheryl- sorry don't know what it is with her, I ...

ha ha, I know only too well what you mean. The same happened to me hence it looks like i have liked several of my pieces

it's great that this was your 500th review, and that's an amazing amount of reviews

duh, some of the best writers come from writing from their own experiences, so well done with that

oh don't get me wrong, i am only disappointed i didn't get to see what really happened. Apart from that it is a good chapter. I guess in your point ...

halo nothing here, lol

oh sorry the first one didn't show up so i posted it twice

thanks again, some of the things u pointed out were deliberate, the parts in speech were done to reflect the characters and their level of intelligence, Tyson was well off ...

thanks, because it was the first chapter i wanted to put in a lot of content, i have already written chapter two but i think its more visual than content ...