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I really liked this poem. I think you did an excellent job with the topic and the flow of the poem was incredibly easy for me. It had its own ...

Personally, I don't HATE the poem or think you should toss it completley. You should NEVER completely toss a poem. There's always something you can work with. First, I will ...

I like the content of your poem, but I don't really like the way it's formatted. For me at least, it's hard to read. Why not try breaking the poem ...

I think the rhyme scheme you chose for this sonnet is unique. I usually see the abba abba aabbcc, but this is different. I like that. As for the whole ...

Javinder was a spineless man tall, and lank, and lean with minute ebony curls that like angry misquitos attached themselves to his head: shiny, tanned by the sun and with ...

I agree with Kitty. I think the dog-ate-my-homework thing is a little overused. You started it out really well and you had me hooked... until the dog thing. I second ...

Two main things that I noticed: 1.) I LOVED the way you connected lines to each other by making an ending a beginning. (I hope that made sense.) 2.)You did ...

I liked the subject of your poem. Your first stanza was a good opener, your last stanza tied together your whole poem nicely, and your third stanza created a really ...

Okay, I agree with most of the things said, except for a couple. First off, if you don't have the whole script completed and you want people to critique what ...

Okay, besides it being a touchy topic (so expect some people to say they don't like the topic), it was pretty good. Well written as a journalistic article. You made ...

I love a lot of the corrections you've made, especially the added stanzas. It helped the poem develop more into dramatic poetry which storytells a lot more than other forms ...

Okay, you had some good images in the poem, but there needs to be more. I don't know why the character in this poem is doing what they do. It ...

This is a very good poem, something you might find in a poetry slam. Rythm isn't necessary all the time with poetry, especially with dramatic poetry. It's all in the ...

From what I've read, you have written a poem about one of my favorite literary characters who can be found in "Invisible Monsters." Am I correct? If I am, I ...

I liked the split view in this poem. It is definitely an interesting topic. First, is there a certain reason you capitalize the start of every line? If there is, ...