mizz-iceberg

Well I was thinking you were personifying fire as God mentioned. But you're post after that got me confused. It that's what you trying to show, then you need to ...

I agree, this poem has potential. If you want to call it a poem. I mean I like the idea behind it but you badly need to get more in ...

Great you posted it!! So have you discarded the other chapter 1 from this story?? I rather liked it. Maybe you can put that chapter as chapter 2, and you ...

Hahah, I found this on my own this time!! I just love how you added in Cameron. It really adds more tension to the story so GREAT JOB!! I never ...

Ooohhh, here it is! Wow. this just keeps getting better and better =P! “What are you arguing about, if you don’t mind my askin’.” She leaned back and looked at ...

Wow. This is quite an interesting poem! I didn't notice too many mistakes so that's good. I liked the theme of tis poem and the rhythm and flow were quite ...

Hey there! I liked this poem though it had no structure or rhythm whatsoever. I think you've got the potential though. You were able to get your emotions on paper ...

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Nice. This showed creativity as I've haven't ever really read anything quite like like this before. Well written!! I didn't really notice anything wrong with this. I like the light ...

Haha I loved this. It was humor yet is was serious and to the point. I could really sense the 'polite' anger and how irritated the protagonist is. I also ...

Hey Ibprice! Welcome to YWS! This poem was not something new or extremely amazing. But it was still something I could relate to. The emotions that you brought in this ...

Hey aestar!! I loved your poetry. I like the feeling and atmosphere of this poem so good job! One thing that seemed to strike me was your rhyming. The rhyming ...

Well personally, I thought it was a bit cliched. The imagery was fantastic though, and the rhythm was also great, but the words and poem seemed rather empty to me. ...

Wow I loved this! The reason I was so awed by this was because you managed to pull something off so smoothly that I'm always having trouble with. The beginning ...