Hello, Emily! And welcome to the YWS. Feel free to PM me if you have any questions on the site. 
Interesting poem, though there are a few things I'd like to point out:
1: Perhaps you should consider dividing this up into stanzas? It's a little daunting right now.
2: At this point, it's a little too much like a list. One-word lines usually give that impression, I think. Thus brings us to the eternal conquest for Showing and NOT Telling. As poets, you can ignore this as you like it, but it would still be nice to have this a little more...hmm...diluted? You could have multiple stanzas for each little snippet: "When you wake up/And realize,/Everything about you is different.", " We all walk around blind,/Unable to see what we are really missing./Obsessing over unimaginable feelings/That no one really understands." &c, which would divert the "list-y"ness of it.
Speaking of diluted, I would really recommend getting rid of the extra spaces. They're a pain to deal with when critiquing. 
3: I like how you bring the "waking up" part back up, but it seems a quite raw there. (By the way, it's "the blink of an eye", not "the blink of and eye.") IMHO, I would change the "but" in the second-to-last line to "Still," so it becomes, "Still, in the blink of an eye:/ You wake up."
And last, but not least: The general rule is that you critique two other pieces before posting your own. Please keep this in mind before posting something else of yours.
To cap off this review, I'd like to suggest that you print out this poem and stick it in a desk or nightstand drawer. Someplace you'll find it again, but not soon. Time is the best forge, and whatnot.
Cheers, and keep writing!
~Sumi
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