Friendship is precious, once in a lifetime,
Rarer than rare, gained only by time
Immortal, lasts forever
Even through time, it cannot sever
Never perfect, always tested,
Dark times soon pass, old issues rested.
Some people think all friends are true,
However, you'll only find a few.
If you find a friend who's true,
Pursue that person, she's one in a few
To the reader (me) you don't really seem to know what you are talking about, artificial intelligence in atleast the type of freindship you are trying to express, as if you read a few other poems on freindship and said, "hey! I bet I can do that too... what rhymes with true?" I also don't like lifetime ryhming with time, but hey, that's just me. Better luck next time 
vet4life13 wrote:Friendship is precious, once in a lifetime,
Rarer than rare, gained only by time
Immortal, lasts forever
Even through time, it cannot sever
Never perfect, always tested,
Dark times soon pass, old issues rested.
Some people think all friends are true,
However, you'll only find a few.
If you find a friend who's true,
Pursue that person, she's one in a few
The poem is too plastic it's like i heard it all before but the style that it is written in isn't used much lately, so that you can bring it back is cool. I'm sorry if it's a bad comment the poem just doesn't touch me or captivate. Once again sorry.
The poem is too plastic it's like i heard it all before but the style that it is written in isn't used much lately, so that you can bring it back is cool. I'm sorry if it's a bad comment the poem just doesn't touch me or captivate. Once again sorry.
I haven't seen an acrostic poem in ages..
This is really good.
It creates a really lovely, positive description of something that is quite often hard to explain.
Like a few other repliers, I am not too keen on the repetition of "true" and think perhaps it would be better if one of them was altered...
Overall, it reads nicely though.
Wow I loved this! The reason I was so awed by this was because you managed to pull something off so smoothly that I'm always having trouble with.
The beginning of the poem was great! Near the ending however I wasn't too thrilled.
I've always had difficulties with acrostic poems.
Thy rhyming didn't seem forced and the overall rhythm was awesome! It flowed very nicely.
It's hard to write about Friendship without it seeming cliche but you pulled that off quite decently. It wasn't cliche at all!
Good Job!
-Keep Writing!
Hi!
First of all, I really liked this. I just don't like the last line. It sounds kinda off and doesn't make much sense.
Perhaps it's best if you come through.
vet4life13 wrote:Friendship is precious, once in a lifetime,
Rarer than rare, gained only by time
Immortal, lasts forever
Even through time it cannot sever
Never perfect, always tested,
Dark times soon pass, old issues rested.
Some people think all friends are true,
However, you'll only find a few.
If you find a friend who's true,
Perhaps it's best if you come through.
Even through time, it cannot sever
I agree with the last post, I like it up until the last few lines where the word "true" seemed to be thrown into my face. Other than that I really liked this.
Nice choice of style - it's not common to find poems written like that on YWS, so yours stands out.
I like it, because even though it says all the stuff that is always said about friendship it's still so true.
There's just one line that I have an issue with -
Please, I beg you, stay true, too.
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