miyaviloves

To be completly honest with you I didn't like this piece much, and it wasn't because it wasn't any good, it's just not really my thing. Jostled through the doors ...

Ok, Im gonna crit this as I read it, so If I say something stupid which then gets answered later, I do apologise :P too long too - too long ...

I really liked this - which is something as Im not a huge fan of poetry - I apprecitae it but I cant write yeah :D I liked the middle ...

Well to start with I will admit I didn't like this atall. I didn't feel that there was anything there, and just becuase it's a song dosen't mean it can't ...

I usually don't like poetry like this...although it was a little cliche in parts I actually enjoyed it :) kisses me with passion, protects me from sin. -Although I like ...

I agree with a lot of what Saint said, I didn't feel anything for the characters at all. I also think you relied a bit too much on dialogue here, ...

As it has taken me ages to crit again everyone had beaten me to it - less work for me though right? hehe. Anyway liked getting a bit of history ...

This was an interesting beginning, im intrigued about the people and their way of life - so i want to read more! But here are my suggestions: “What is your ...

Hmm yes, I liked it, but like Gwenevire I'm no good at poetry so I can't really give any technical or useful tips or anything. I didn't reallllyl get what ...

yay I didn't really have to wait for this part as I have been away for so long! so YAY...bet the next part will be ages tho :P Anyways, I ...

Well, I'm so sorry that I haven't read this for ages!!!! But here we go: I can't help agree with the above crits - that it's lacking that certain something, ...

That was really good - you used descrition well without over doing it. I understand thatthe moon is important but in the opening paragraphs you repeat 'moon' a lot of ...

This is an interesting beginning! “Five more minutes,” Came the seven-year-old’s protests . -I would put protest here as he only protested once ^_^ I think you could make it ...

I think that because it is slightly obscure really makes the story! It makes you think - andf you do give the answers in the end so I think that ...

Hmm I have to admit that I don't really see anything in this poem, you talk about how you wonder about things, but there is no real depth in it ...