Young Writers Society

Hmmm, I liked this. It was quite powerful.

You are a talented writer. Your themes are a little cliche, but you manage to write a strong poem. You have nice language and your rhythm rocks.

My only nasty critique is about the rhyming: the first stanza has a rhyme scheme, it seems, and maybe the second too, but after that, it dissolves. If you didn't intend it to rhyme and the first stanza was just a coincidence, you should probably go back and edit it so that it doesn't give people the wrong impression.

Other than that, great poem. I enjoyed it!

~GryphonFledgling

Hi! It's me again.
I just wanted to say a few things:


[quote] Moonlight creeps over the horizon.
Darkness evokes all that is bright.
I linger into the shadows,
to find my prince of night.

I love this part. It has a great opening to the story and I think you did a good job. It has a lot of power and makes the reader feel.

After that I have nothing to say because it just takes you in and wraps all it's power around you until you can't feel the ground. In other words, it's amazing and KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK!
shanan-cat!

Thank you for your request miyaviloves, after reading through this piece one more time i realized it didnt make sense so i replaced

kisses me with passion, protects me from sin

Kisses me with passion, envelops me with sin

You have been writing a lot of poems lately and i haven't that is because i am saving my points. I really like it but like what miyaviloves said that it was somewhat cliche i agree. But this is a poem that i think people will enjoy. I do. If you need me you know how to reach me.

Oh yeah i like your new ending to "Stone cold" very good *Clap,Clap*. Well see you around! XD

SimonCowellLuver

I usually don't like poetry like this...although it was a little cliche in parts I actually enjoyed it

kisses me with passion, protects me from sin.