misspriss

I was kinda rushed when I made it, thank you for the feedback!

Ahhhh, that IS a bit more believable. :) (Sorry! Homeschooler over here! We don't really go by grades. :oops:)

Oh! I loved The Blue Sword, I believe the author is Robin McKinley. :-)

Wow, well, I did have something to say, but Phorcys pretty much just said it, so I guess I'll have to be one of the people who clap you on ...

I agree with Phorcys, and I didn't even really hear any rhythm.

This certeinly needs some capitilization--I'm a capitilazation natzi :-)--capitilize Jesus.

This is good, but I think it would be better if you capitilized your i's. :-)

Hehee. That's funny Claudette. :D This is pretty, but, what is it? Can you tell me?

It's good, but I'm not a poetry person, so I wouldn't know much about poetry, but please, PLEASE, capitalize your I's. A shrink would say that it shows lack of ...

This is good...but you skipped over some punctuations. I suggest you read this out loud to yourself and imagine yourself being one of the characters. Where would you normally pause? ...

Wow! Way to go!

Is this supposed to be the start of a story? The grammar and spelling is very bad, read it out loud and correct them.

Wow! I love how you did this! It made me want to laugh. My favorite thing about it is the suprise ending, I also love how they both actually want ...

For me, one of the most stressed parts is My brain in doubt. But the "Boxed in, Locked out, seems fine to me.

I like it! Of course, I don't know much about poetry, but I like it! :-)