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  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Dancing at your fingertips

    I really like this poem but it confused me a little bit i think you should elaborate more also it seemed a little bland like it could use some figurative ...

    Jul 31, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Icy Paths Chapter 1

    It's unclear what's going on and what they're being chosen for exactly. Marcus will be chosen, definitely. The opponent who had already won was sitting erect as a poker in ...

    Jun 23, 2009
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: A fairy tale

    I really liked this piece because it was clichée but then evolved with your own feelings, experiences and details. Usually i don't like it when poems rhyme but the rhyming ...

    Jun 20, 2009
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Do not write to me

    I really love your poem, it's creative and i can tell you really mean what you're saying though it could be more emotional and deep if you added some metaphors ...

    May 19, 2009
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Bully Blues

    The full caps is a little annoying and as TL G-Wooster said childish. I liked the subject of your poem it was creative, though I think you should get deeper ...

    Apr 16, 2009
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Do I love him?

    Do I love I don't know He doesn't act like i should show Him the love , I show He sits with me at lunch one day He ignores me ...

    Apr 16, 2009
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Look What You Make Me Do

    Look what you make me do, Fall head over heels. I think I like to fall, The funny way it feels. I really like that line :) When I look ...

    Apr 10, 2009
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: A poem about....him

    Elbows nudge past me, In this vicious jungle, Nice metaphor I see his striped blue sweater, Move in the crowd, Maybe a transition here? My heart falls, Down to my ...

    Apr 2, 2009
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Foolish Hope

    I really love this poem, it's amazing, wonderful i really don't have much of a critique though when you say "But that's no great a trouble, " that line doesn't ...

    Mar 31, 2009
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: False Love (i didn't know what to call it soo..)

    This is my first post! I hope you like it! And if you have any title suggestions, feel free to share! My hands are clutching my script, I watch in ...

    Mar 31, 2009
  • Short Story » Fanfiction, General Re: Twiligt Spoof

    It really was better then the whole twilight series, I'm a fan of twilight though the writing wasn't that great your story was funny throughout the whole thing but more ...

    Mar 30, 2009
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Not right for me or each other

    This was a really touching poem i think it's a little more narrative then whatever category this is :) one thing though towards the middle it started to get a ...

    Mar 30, 2009
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Scared

    You hold me high, keeping me sane. Will you bind me to another chain? I really love this stanza it shows the dependence of the narrarator but also introduces the ...

    Mar 30, 2009


The greatest part of a writer’s time is spent in reading, in order to write; a man will turn over half a library to make one book.
— Samuel Johnson