midnightread

Hi shineondiamondeyes I really like it. I want to know more about the mc and what happened to him, like why did he kill Alexis? I can't see anything wrong ...

Hi Kaedee I really like it and like before, nothing jumps out at me as wrong. I think the way the story is structured is really good. I especially love ...

Hi Kaewrite I really like it. It captures my attention and I think you should carry on writing it. I think that you missed out commas in some places but ...

Hi katecull I like this post a lot. I only saw a few problems and most of them could be sorted out if you re-read this post. Every member of ...

Hi katecull I really like it. I only have a couple of nit-picks, mainly that you need to read it through as you're missing commas. I also noticed some other ...

Hi nativecatcher I really like it. I only saw a few mistakes and those were mainly missing commas apart from and blew little girl’s sweaters should be and blew the ...

Hi Misguided I really like this. I only have one nit-pick I found the supplied I needed should be I found the supplies I needed That's all. Can you pm ...

Hi iCarlyfan I love the Twilight series and this would make a brilliant addition to Breaking Dawn. Now, down to nit-picking. I can't see anything wrong with it. I really ...

Hi PenNPaper, I like the post. I think the way you start it off, with the mc searching for something to eat makes the story feel more real. I also ...

Hi destiny is calling, I really like the story so far but you have no capital letters at all, which makes the story look like it was written by a ...

Hi Bugwhisker, I really like this story and I think I may have to read the actual series. I didn't see anything wrong with it so I have no nit-pick. ...

HI brittany005, I love the Maximum Ride series and I think that this would make a good addition to the series. The way all the characters are in your story ...

Hi Kaedee, Thanks for the pm. I'm going to have to ask you to pm me again when you post more, since I am completely hooked. Nothing really leaps out ...

Hi shubhiloves2write I like the story line though the plot is hard to get. Right, the nit-picks, You have spaces were there shouldn't be and no spaces were you need ...

Hi brittany005 I really like this post and its really interesting. My four siblings are twins so I understand the evil twin thing, which I think makes the story more ...