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I don't care if it's a little cliche. I loved it!!

Awww. The beginning was sad. Gosh! Why did you have to make me like Neil? Gosh, this always happens to me. Even though he's barely in it I loved him. ...

I don't know why but I always read critiques before I read the story. Don't ask why. I saw All Time Low. I read it. Anyways... It as so good ...

Okay. You've reviewed like, all my stories and I've never reviewed yours so I am. There weren't many nit-picks and I'm not good at them so I'll just do the ...

Hey new story! Cool! Everybody else did all the nit-picking so I won't. I don't mean to be harsh with what I'm about to say but...the end was a little ...

You reviewed my story. So, now I'm reviewing yours! This is a great storyline and it's very interesting. Here's my nit-picks. I felt like a coward breaking up with her ...

Hey, I'm back for the next part. I hope you don't mind. :) This was very good! It kept my interest. Just a few things. You know the drill, corrections ...

Hey! I would just like to start by saying you have a very strongly written piece on your hands! Onto the nit-piks. My comments are in italics and my fixes ...

This was very good. There was so much detail which I really enjoyed. I think the concept of the story was very interesting and it leaves me wanting to know ...

This was a truly touching story and I really enjoyed it. I didn't see many grammar errors. It's a true story right? It was so sweet how one trip to ...

Hey! First real post, that's exciting. So does this mean I'm the first real person to review your first real post? Well, I'm honored. Okay, enough with that. My fixes ...

Hi! This was very good and very desciptive. So, here's my critique. My fixes are in bold. My comments are in italics. I don't feel like doing the separate quotes ...

I still think it's good! Onto the critique... I flinched when my contact connected with my eye but it was in I blinked a couple of times until it was ...

Wow this is so...dramatic. I really liked it! When I enjoy a story I tend to not pay attention to grammar and to be honest I'm not so good at ...

Hey! Welcome to YWS. So, on to the review... Gently she moves towards you, her eyes peering into, you burning you almost. Okay, I think you should remove the comma ...