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Re: If The World.
Hello there! I see that in this piece there is a message. I also notice that it's an apocalypse poem. I like how you seem to be asking the reader, ...
Dec 24, 2012 -
Re: Original Masterpiece
21 times. You used the word "fuck" or "fucking" 21 times. Now I'm no poet, but in any poem, I find it a bit annoying when ANY word is used ...
Dec 23, 2012 -
Re: Desk Lamps Don't Have Coals
A wise thing to keep in mind: "Do not over explain in a hundred pages that which can be understood in a sentence." This is not always the case, if ...
Dec 23, 2012 -
Re: because you know yourself
This piece is written with very descriptive language, and your use of the second person is very good. I comend you on the tone of the story also, the kind ...
Dec 20, 2012 -
Re: Petals of the Fallen
Quite possibly the most beautiful language I have seen in a poem on this site in the days I've spent here. Not saying I've been here long. This paints a ...
Dec 19, 2012 -
Re: The Shadow's Light
Methrirr123, here to review. I have no problem with the story line. I really don't. But you seem to be forcing yourself to use a fantassy voice that shows predominantly ...
Dec 18, 2012 -
Re: The Fart
It is unique. I will go as far as to say that a poem has never instructed me to be a fart. It causes the phantom of the smell itself ...
Dec 18, 2012 -
Re: Baby Trees
This is an erie story, written with genuine emotion, and a very sad theme. It makes a reader feel, which is all you can hope for in a piece like ...
Dec 18, 2012 -
Re: Baby Trees
This is an erie story, written with genuine emotion, and a very sad theme. It makes a reader feel, which is all you can hope for in a piece like ...
Dec 18, 2012 -
Re: Jorvar the Blooddrinker (Warhammer fanfic)
as much as I like Warhammer, I fail to see the purpose of this piece. Nothing really happens. It's really just a string of dialogue between a few people who ...
Dec 18, 2012 -
Re: The Essence of Fear Herself
Here to Review your piece, it's Methrirr123! Anyway, the story was great. I loved the ending. There were a good many run on's but they didn't ruin the story or ...
Dec 18, 2012 -
Re: Anywhere but Down
heartwarming. Causes the reader to feel sorrow, and happiness, and adoration all at once. This is a very good story, to say the least. To say the most would be ...
Dec 17, 2012
