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mellophone7

  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Ideas

    Oooohhh, I love this so much! This is exactly how I feel SO much of the time as a writer! Plus, you wrote it in free verse in a long, ...

    Dec 12, 2011
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: The Train to Work

    I had a hard time getting into this poem. Maybe it was how long it was, or just the grammar in it. I kind of liked how you wrote it ...

    Dec 11, 2011
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Six Love Questions

    Wow, this is so perfect! And completely true! I absolutely love it! I like how you covered all the questions and I especially like your line Love is indescribable. So ...

    Nov 23, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Semi-sweet Dreams

    This is interesting, and it was so, so cool to read. I really enjoyed it. It's very well written. I really didn't notice any errors with it, although I kind ...

    Nov 15, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Death Avenue

    I made the mistake of having dark music playing in the background while reading this. :P It's interesting to see what you keep coming up with. The only thing I ...

    Nov 13, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: The Golden Gate

    I love this poem. And, yes, I was able to figure out what it was about. :) I love reading poems that rhyme, and this one had some really good ...

    Oct 23, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: My Secret Love

    This is a really good poem that shows a lot of emotion. You did a very good job with writing it. I got completely wrapped up in it, and it's ...

    Oct 23, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Indefinite Blue

    Unbroken sorrow swan-scattered in a dice-throw— you outlive yourself. Unfortunately, I have to agree with dante93. There's hardly anything here. I know haiku are really short, but I don't understand

    Oct 17, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: A true writer

    This was a good start, but I also felt that it was lacking something. This verbal portrait You've painted with soft words. I can see it right in front of ...

    Oct 17, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: The Question Mark

    :) This poem made me smile. I always love seeing poems that personify things...like a question mark. :) Anyways, the only thing I wanted to comment on was that I ...

    Oct 12, 2011
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Sea and me

    Okay. So, the poem was good but to admit, it was a little confusing. I agree with this; the only stanza that wasn't slightly confusing was the third one. But ...

    Oct 12, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Stormy Blue Skies

    I love this poem just about as much as I love clouds, which is a LOT. :) I just have a few suggestions to make. As they dash through the ...

    Oct 12, 2011
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Paradox

    Okay, me being a personal fan of this subject, I did like this poem, but I'll admit I expected something a little longer. As I believe one comment already stated, ...

    Oct 12, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: ...

    Woooow....this is so incredibly beautiful. Such an amazingly written poem! The only comment I would make would be on the very last few lines. as you swing, ascending along an ...

    Oct 12, 2011
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: The Dance of The Horse

    Hm, I like this. You definitely captured the beauty of a horse, here. :) I do have some nitpicks, though. Time is frozen. The air is blowing through his thick ...

    Oct 12, 2011


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