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Re: Whipped Cream Icing Please
Loved the voice. Very natural. Loved the message, it definitely is true. Kind of the same with all holidays! I'd clean up the missing apostrophes, spaces, and capitalization, but I'll ...
Aug 25, 2013 -
Re: Glass Girl
Hey there! This poem really caught my interest. We're working with someone/something called "Glass girl" and jellybeans. Very unique. The flow is nice; I like your voice a lot, very ...
Aug 25, 2013 -
Re: What Makes You Feel Orange
Cleverly hilarious and unique. Perhaps two of my favorite qualities in writing. :-) The only question I had that didn't get answer is how old Adam is. As others commented, ...
Aug 23, 2013 -
Re: Letters to You
I have to say I really liked this. The words you used and voice really stood out to me, and as said I really liked the last stanza and how ...
Aug 6, 2010 -
Re: My Perception of Time
Your poem is unique and that is what I like about it. I think adding a bit more to it and explaining more about why you can't understand time would ...
Aug 6, 2010 -
Re: Writers Block
You definitely made some good points that I totally connected to but I agree with maryletsflyaway. I don't really see a point to it, other than it's truth. Whenever I ...
Aug 6, 2010 -
Re: A poem I found..
I liked the similies you used! Very intelligent for a 2nd or 1st grader sheesh, you may even be smarter than your own parents. ;) This is very cute though. ...
Aug 6, 2010 -
Re: Tea Party (revised)
This was really unique, I've never read a poem about the Boston Tea Party!! This was clever, a couple comments is I don't think 'galore' really fits, I don't know ...
Apr 10, 2010 -
Re: Hands
This was an intriguing story, I absolutely loved the beginning paragraph about the hands! It really got my attention. Although the beginning scene did seem to be a bit cliché, ...
Apr 7, 2010 -
Re: Love
I thought this was a cute poem, a bit vague and not very descriptive like others have mentioned, blah blah blah. But it is definitely cliche, even the title alone. ...
Apr 7, 2010 -
Re: Human Desire
Hello! There is a couple things that bugged me like... In this moment Of my torment I agree with Eimear, if you could find a different word to rhyme it ...
May 4, 2009 -
Re: Boys vs Girls
Hi! Sean Gordon sat in his tree house with his two brothers Connor and Max. This is just a suggestion, but this is the first sentence of your story and ...
Mar 24, 2009 -
Re: Who Would've Thought? 4
Wow, this is almost as amazing as your Obama poster. :D This is really good! I love the funny things you throw in, like the cat eating teacher. I loved ...
Jan 25, 2009 -
Re: Untitled Chapter 2
Keep going with this!!! Please!! I am needing to read more. :) I like this a lot, it's really good. Frank made me laugh with his little menstruating comment. I ...
Jan 24, 2009 -
Re: This cant be the end
First off, I agree with TL G-Wooster that the beginning is pretty simple and nothing that really draws you in. When you talked about the birth, it sounded like it ...
Jan 24, 2009
