Letters to You

“Letters to You”
I woke up in the morning I dont like this, It makes the poem a bit awkward. Perhaps if you said, 'I woke up this morning' or something else that flows.
I can see the seagulls soaring
The breeze swept the window curtain
The sun is shimmering, peaking out behind the mountain

It’s Sunday today
I wish you could come and stay
The light is resonating along the wall
I am waiting patiently down the hall

You shouldn't have stayed too long on the rhyming. It kills the piece.

I liked reading this.

Anger

I have to say I really liked this. The words you used and voice really stood out to me, and as said I really liked the last stanza and how you tied in sending letters.

Here is some suggestions I have -

The sun is shimmering, peaking out behind the mountain

This was mentioned, but I agree this line is a bit cliche. Also, it is lengthy compared to the rest of the lines and kind of breaks up the flow... and feels kind of awkward.

It’s Sunday today
I wish you could come and stay

I didn't really see a point to say that it is Sunday, it is just kind of random. I think you could find a better way to say "I wish you could come and stay" to make it a little bit more interesting.

Other than that, I think you did a great job. Your vocabulary was great, simply I just really enjoyed reading this. Keep it up! =)

Hey Virsanity,
It's Fiction903 and I am going to review your poem. I thought that you did an okay job but I do have a couple of suggestions. My corrections will be in bold.

And so time passes by
Slowly feeling weary
Suddenly clouds start to darken
The peril dissipates,
I feel shaken

I love the last stanza of your poem. It is very descriptive. I thought your use of couplets made the poem seem bouncy and almost happy which did not fit with what you are trying to say.Where words rhyme in a poem effect the mood of the poem. Hopefully my review helps you.
Keep writing,
Fiction.

Hello I love you're title and the last paragraph. What i disliked slightly was

The sun is shimmering, peaking out behind the mountain

Its just a little cliche, when describing things try to focus on your memories of such things. If this is what you're already doing than i would say just try and describe things a little more uniquely. I think this comes with experience. I didn't really like this

It is Sunday today. i wish you could come and stay

Although its straight to the point it sounds a little too simple and almost sounds like you've just tried to rhyme these lines.
What i loved about the last paragraph was it was very unique and well written. I love th idea that troubles can fly away when writing a letter.
Its a great length and the title represents it well and made me want to read it. There are moments of brilliance in this poem and i love the vibe/mood it gives. Just work on your describing, making it a little more unique, and making you're whole poem as good as the last paragraph. Also maybe try and incorporate some mataphors/ similes into you're writing.
Well done