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Hey, maleficent here for a second review! Mom and I are sneaking through the shadows of a forgotten peach orchard when I hear the gun shot. I really liked this ...

Hey, maleficent here! I got you for Secret Santa, yay! Their eyes meet and you can plainly see they are both hormonal ass teenagers happy to be in one another’s ...

"Hey," he greeted me with reaised eyebrows a sideways turn of his lips. [i]"Hey," he greeted me with raised eyebrows and a sideways turn of his lips. wrappped wrapped* Like ...

Maleficent here with a review! I could risk him hurting me. I could risk being hurt. oposite Opposite* but what seemed sexy when James had done it only seemed creep ...

Percy Jackson fan fiction? This is like my own personal beacon, it called to me. I recently discovered the film and I'm currently reading the book. It's safe to say ...

”Excuse the pink paper; it was all I could find on such short notice/ I think a comma after pink paper would be better. ”Simply ignore that fact for the ...

"Alexandria Wind!" a small, pale girl asks, blinking at me. A small* "Y-Y-Yes?" I ask, shaking, grabbing Dak's arm. I think you should choose one of these words to use, ...

The air was calm. The grass swayed in the wind, literally kissing me as it brushed up against my lips as I lay sideways on the grass. Suddenly I was ...

This sensational feeling... It feels good Just a personal note, but I would have written it differently. You say the feeling is sensational which is a good in terms of ...

to glance then and then to glance and then the dress I wore even today was hiked--- the dress I wore today as if wish for one more gasp of ...

I loved the first paragraph, partly because it reminded me of a story I'd read a year or so ago. 'Her Vampire Husband' it was the same scenario and I ...

This is really good for a first piece of writing, I thought it was nicely written. I also liked the whole setting of the piece and feel that it could ...