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this poem didnt make much sense and it was a little bit to much to take in lulu

the last line "To love you need two" it doesnt really fit in to the smooth poem you were writting above, but other than that its good lulu

i have to admit, it doesnt make much sense to me lulu

i really like this, it's not like every other poem, you strew the words together in a nice simplistic way as well lulu

i dont want to be mean, but every one talks about that problem, but you should try to be a little bit differnet, the name is what struck me, but ...

the part about "my dripping, lazily" that doesnt really fit in lulu

i like it, but the tital doesnt really show of the poem lulu

i like it its differnt but at the same time entertaining to read lulu

wow this is really good i only have a few remmarks "Stress, Why is there stress bothring my rider?" you didnt spell bothering wright However we will be the target ...

it was really good u have amazing description and i like how you show emotion and how the mood is set. its great! lyndzi

youre story is very good, you could use a little tiny bit more description, but you really dont have too, its allready very good! Lyndzi

wow thats crazy good! I actually piactured it in my mind, and i havn't done that with any body elses writing on here! That was seriously good! Lyndzi

normally thats not my kinda reading, but it was really good, ur description was good too! lyndzi

ok i like it, a lot, but at the begining u talk about how not a lot of people believe in magic, but in the second paragraph you talk about ...

Just like the other comment about the discription, i read past that, and then had to read it, but its pretty good! lyndzi