lordgluzman

I am a boy, but I understand thats what a fallen in love girl wants or dreams. This would be a great song. But one problem /////////////////////////////////// I've been waiting ...

pretty interesting and good luck with. I Havent done reading it (really long story) But who else is helping you. Is it Ollie? Can you tell maybe I still remember ...

I don't know, I like it but some rhyming parts were forced. Once across the street I slow It doesn't really makes sense to me. I also didn't get what ...

Ow my Lord. THAT WAS AWSOME!!!!!!!!!!! I dont know how to correct you. Your song just hit the spot. I could even sing this out loud if I wanted to. ...

It was hell of a song. It was awesome. I could sing it in my head, it also teaches morals. I not gonna write you the mistakes you did because ...

It was really good,but it was too short I HATE SHORT POEMS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! they drive me nuts. If you put all the lines together and you wonet put that much space ...

The poem was grate, teaches morals. It is happy peace. But their was a problem I am like a roadway Going every which way you ryhme only once. If you ...

Really liked this story. Your descriptions were so good that I could imagine this all. I know I have to tell you what you should improve but I don't know ...

Ya!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! that's my friend. You are back on track king awesome you real mother raper.Even though I listen to heavy but still this was real great s@i%. But their were ...

Your songs are getting sexyer and sexyer. I liked evrything but I think it is more like a poem maybe you should move it to another catogary. But is one ...

The song it self was pretty good. The rythem was good infact I can play it on my bass guiter and drums.But I didnt rerally get the point of it ...