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lilithyoung

lilithyoung

  • Poetry » Realistic, Romantic Re: Forgive Me

    Wow. I'm such a sucker for shorter poems that can convey such deep emotion. This is such a great example of that. I especially love the line: "If I could ...

    Jul 17, 2019
  • Poetry » General, General Re: The Note

    Oh wow. I really love this piece. I especially like the lines "I broke down to my misery, I couldn't face my fears." and "The Beast, it got its feast. ...

    Jul 17, 2019
  • Poetry » Narrative, Dramatic Re: SHE

    Aww this poem is amazing! At the beginning I was imagining this badass, hardworking queen and to find out you were describing your mom the whole time makes my heart ...

    Aug 7, 2018
  • Poetry » General, General Re: anger

    Hello darling. First of all, I have always loved your work. And I love this one. I love the way you compare your anger to a fire. One thing I ...

    Jul 31, 2018
  • Poetry » Other, Realistic Re: hand in the wolf's mouth

    I love this poem. I am a sucker for symbolism and short poetry, and you have packed a Hulk-sized punch in literally only five lines. Five. That is amazing. I'm ...

    Jul 16, 2018
  • Poetry » Spiritual, Dramatic Re: Oh my soul! My battered soul!

    If Shakespeare and Edgar Allan Poe collaborated, this poem would be their greatest piece. I love the premise of a speaker addressing their own soul. I think that idea makes ...

    Jul 16, 2018
  • Novel / Chapter » Mystery / Suspense, Romantic Re: No title yet

    Hey thank you for sharing this story! I hope you find a title for it soon! One thing that I would suggest you change is the syntax. Instead of writing ...

    Jul 15, 2018
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Narrative Re: Early Sunset - Chapter 1

    Hi thank you for sharing this story! I really like your style of writing, and the premise for the story is really creative! One thing I like is how you ...

    Jul 15, 2018
  • Script » Film, Realistic Re: Golden

    Hey great script! As an actress myself, I simply love reading scripts. So much potential in every single one! That being said, here are some things I would change: 1. ...

    Jul 15, 2018
  • Poetry » General, General Re: bittersweet

    Wow I was just scrolling through your page to see what your writing style and just... wow. I am blown away. Thank you for sharing this with the world. You ...

    Jul 15, 2018
  • Short Story » Realistic, General Re: Crime and punishment

    Hey! Welcome to YWS! I'm new here as well. Hopefully we both get the hang of this soon! The one major criticism I have for this story is how you ...

    Jul 15, 2018
  • Novel / Chapter » Fanfiction, Supernatural Re: Percy Jackson fan fic (title in works) Part 2

    Hi luv! Thank you for sharing this fanfic! I personally am a huge fan of Percy Jackson, and it was nice to see that people are still creating stories about ...

    Jul 15, 2018
  • Poetry » Realistic, General Re: Death

    I actually really love this poem. This tackles a topic that a lot of poets cover, but I've never seen it covered like this. Because you never really get over ...

    Jul 15, 2018
  • Poetry » Narrative, Lyrical Re: ithaka

    Beautiful poem! I really really love this one. I am a huge Greek geek so from the beginning I loved the Odyssey allusion. I especially love how you even referenced ...

    Jul 14, 2018
  • Poetry » Theatre, Dramatic Re: Theatre

    Wondeful poem! As a theatre kid, I understand the struggle of daily life, and the relief we feel when we are finally onstage doing what we do best. I really ...

    Jul 14, 2018


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