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Re: Love and things like it:)
Hey! So i really liked this. However, I think that you should try to put more emotion into it. It seemed to skim the surface of what you were trying ...
Jul 24, 2011 -
Re: The Ghost Above us.
Hello, I really like this. I only have a couple of critques. First of all, I think that it's a little rambley in certain places. Exapmle; I’ve seen the rise ...
Jul 24, 2011 -
Re: So they said
This is really very good. As ther reader, I can feel the anger and the confusion behind it. Yet, at the same time it isn't specific. So I can develop ...
Jul 23, 2011 -
Re: Maybe...
Hello! I loved this poem. And it's shortness doesn't leave much room for error. But I'm going to be super picky here and see what I can do to help. ...
Jul 23, 2011 -
Re: When Will It End?
Hi There! I don't have a lot of time, but I really liked this and I want to get in a review. So here it goes! My comment and suggestions ...
Jul 22, 2011 -
Re: The One I love the Most
Hello there! I wanna start by saying that I really loved this. My comments and suggestions are as follows. Your fingers trace the scar ; t he secret I held ...
Jul 22, 2011 -
Re: I tried
I though I loved you, but you hurt me,I tried to love you and,all you gave me was pain,you made me happy for awhile,but messed it up by making me ...
Jul 21, 2011 -
Re: Intertwined
Personally, I love this poem the way it is. But it's so good that I want more. That seems a bit confusing. But basically, I would love it longer or ...
Jul 21, 2011 -
Re: Stuck in a Dead F**k
Hello, to start out--i liked the idea of this. As twisted and strange as it may be, it has great potential. It sort of reminded me of a perverted Edgar ...
Jul 21, 2011 -
Re: Airbag
I'm not sure what to say about this. At first it kind of struck me as one of those peoms where people will just throw together analogies and metaphors hoping ...
Jul 20, 2011 -
Re: Connected
hello! i enjoyed reading your poem. the concept was something i can relate to, which drew my attention to it. however. the overall layout was a bit...unorganized and sloppy, in ...
Jul 20, 2011 -
Re: Somewhere Only Harry Knows (very small HP spoilers)
well...ill get straight to it- with all do respect, this was not good. i understand that it was suppose to be a parody--but that made it seem like you were ...
Jul 19, 2011 -
Re: Mischief Managed: Saying "Until Next Time" To Harry
This was amazing. I, as well, feel very deeply about the series. The way you wrote about the books and movies is exactly how I feel as do billions of ...
Jul 18, 2011 -
Re: Forever
it was a good poem but i found the metapohors a little confusing. also, you had quite a few grammatical errors. it also kinda of bothered me that you had ...
Jul 18, 2011 -
Re: The Ghost I Hear
it wasnt bad... i think that you relied a little to much on rhyming. but for your first poem, it was pretty good. the conceot if your poem was interesting ...
Jul 17, 2011
