Intertwined

by ClinicalCynic

Published April 15, 2011

Let's burn back the stars
And drift into the night sky
All regret aside
A nexus of hope
A refuge, a haven in each other's breath
Tendrils of nostalgia
Waves of recollection

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hayley10019
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hayley10019 commented Comment · Jul 21, 2011

It's quite beautiful and short. I liked it all, and I don't want to write too much but I liked it a lot! (:

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lexieells
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lexieells wrote a review Review · Jul 21, 2011

Personally, I love this poem the way it is. But it's so good that I want more. That seems a bit confusing. But basically, I would love it longer or the same length. The simplicity of it really draws my attention. That's mainly why I like it. The sense of desire that's within it--I can't even describe, it's amazing. Very very original. I look foward to reading more of your work. Please, keep writing.

-Lexi :)

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ClinicalCynic
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ClinicalCynic commented Comment · Apr 21, 2011

For all of those that are wanting more? GOOD. I like writing with the feel of the Romantics: a feeling of yearning and longing. My goal is to transmit that yearning and longing into my readers. In my opinion, just like a good book, a good poem will stick with you and leave you wanting more. :) I might try to write another one in the same style and make it a bit longer for those of you that like long poems. I'll save my lecture on how I think the very nature of poems is to say as much in as little, but meh, everyone's not me. :D

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Lunasol21
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Lunasol21 wrote a review Review · Apr 17, 2011

I cannot express to you how much I love the simplicity and language used in this poem. It really expresses so much in so little lines. I cannot find any error in it, but please don't expand on it and don't add any grammar - I love it just the way it is(:
I look foward to reading more poems like these. Happy writing!

WriterMajorInRomance wrote a review Review · Apr 16, 2011

] it's too short but I love it. I also felt like I wish this could be longer, because I want more of this! :D sooo great!!

] love the line "Let's burn back the stars, and drift into the night sky" whoa..!

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tgirly
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tgirly wrote a review Review · Apr 15, 2011

It might have been a little too short; I was just getting into it and then it was done. But that's just my opinion. It's a really really really good poem, it's the type that you reread over and over again and never gets boring. The poem is extremely original.

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darkangel_05
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darkangel_05 commented Comment · Apr 15, 2011

I love short poems.
Your poem is short.

conclusion: I love your poem.

keep writing!

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Soulkana
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Soulkana wrote a review Review · Apr 15, 2011

Haha this is beautiful and simple. Yet this is most brilliant and wonderful. I hope to read more of your works later. I can not find any spelling errors or any corrections. All I say would try and lengthen it to give it more life but that is a suggestion that you do not have to follow. Good luck and Keep up the good work. Happy Writing!!!!
Soulkana<3



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