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Hey! I really liked this, I love story set in the early 1900's! Though at first I read the date wrong and though it said 2012, and was so confused ...

Hey There! I'm glad you requested a review because I really enjoyed reading this:D I like how you got straight to the point within a few paragraphs as to what ...

Hello! This was a lovely short story, and I think you've done really well with it. There is not really that much to say about it that others haven't already, ...

Hi there! This was a sweet story, but I was a little lost at the start I guess. It jumped around a little bit. First things first, Lines between your ...

Nawww, this is lovely! It's beautifully written and it gave me butterflies! I loved the way its written as in speaking directly to the companion/reader, and how no names are ...

Hi again! Glad to see you changed the style to first person:) I'm beginning to understand the world you have here. It's very fairy-tale like and make-believe, which I admire ...

Hi! This is a lovely little fairy-tale styled prolouge you have here:) At first I was a little wary of the style, as it came off not very 'creative' or ...

Hello! :D (Before I begin, I should mention I haven't read the other chapters.) This was a fantastic story, and I admire your determination to have written such a lengthy ...

Hi! I haven't read any of the earlier works, but I really like this. I'm very curious as to what their powers are, and what danger they were speaking of ...

Hi There! :D This is nice short chapter you have here. I havent read the other chapters (though I'm thinking about it...), but I'll do my best to review this ...

Well, it may not be my pick of music.. but the lyrics seem pretty good:) They have a good rhythm and the word choice is is really good too! However, ...

IM SO CONFUSED! Not because of your writing, but because I have no idea what could happen next, or about what happened before. I guess if you want to create ...

Pretty good song here:) You have a nice structure and beat going. Well, I imagined a loud drum beat and some cool guitars in my head.. kinda like a rock/ ...

I know you dont want to hear it, but you should probably put in the time to edit the mistakes out. In the middle somewhere a section was repeated, confused ...

This may need some work.. First you should re-read it and edit. Here are some mistakes I found: A male vocie asked (should be 'voice'), "what are you.. (needs a ...