ladyworkz

You are brilliant. with no rhyme scheme you still manage to make your lines flow together. this work is over-flowing woth emotion and a bitterness that is palpable. someone is ...

thank you for the comments. more would be appreciated.

You were talking about the death within yourself weren't you? after reading this poem again i understood what you were trying to say. in losing yourself you couldn't understand what ...

Thank you for the responses and suggestions. just a note, the poem is for my daughter...not about her. in the poem i am actually talking to her father, his strong ...

This poem is very well written. Any reader would happily note that you have a very strong idea in your mind and know exactly what you are saying. Stellar descriptions ...

Very interesting poem. i love how at the end you state that you need help, and then emphasize it on the last line by REALIZING you need help. it was ...

Good poem. Worded well and easy to follow. Good Work!!!

Wonderful story! Brilliant way of telling it. Imaginative and novel worthy. Good Work!!!

Hi there! Just wanted to let you know this was a beautiful poem! my favorite lines: she hid it with elegance and a smile splendid, felt like someone's dream. will ...

Yes! sarebear had it absolutely correct! except that the king had two lovers, realizing too late that the one he chose was not the one he loved. Thank you for ...