So I haven't post anything for a very long time. So here is a haiku poem. I'm not too sure about it. Comment are great(: and suggestion are better.
A Beautiful Ballerina
Behind the curtain
She waits for her time to shine
Her heart is racing
The stage is now shown
The light flashes down on her,
And she starts to dance
In her pink pointe shoes
She travels through time and space;
Flying high with grace
Spinning ‘round and ‘round
Her tutu twirls with beauty
She amazes all
She has gain much strength,
But hides it with elegance
And a soft smile
She is passionate;
Dancing with her heart and soul
Inside her own world
The ending has come
She takes a step back only to
Close her eyes and breathe
She danced her very best
She shined in every light
She opens her eyes
She is a ballerina
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Hello! Here to review your wonderful poem.
I think you should add some punctuations, like periods or other symbols. One more thing, I think you should describe how she looked physically, and explain the reason she's called beautiful. Although it's already well written, I think it lacks something, and that's it. Her appearance.
I'm not good at reviewing poems so I guess I don't have much to say.
Good job and I like it. I love haikus.
-darkangel_05
Hi there! Just wanted to let you know this was a beautiful poem! my favorite lines:
splendid, felt like someone's dream. will be reading more from you.
Very pleasent poem!
I do love haiku, and I've never seen anyone use it for a ballerina, so well done!
This is a great poem, and created a great aray of imagery in my head that created a little slideshow!
Keep on writing, and I'd love to see more haiku from you!!!
Hello there
I thought the flow of the poem was graceful and I liked it. I liked the way you described the feelings and actions during the performance.
I think something is missing in this line. Maybe you meant "gained" instead of "gain".
Anyways, that's the only problem I had. Good job
Oh this is just pleasant and beautiful!! i think this is so cute and perfect!! Wonderful Haiku!
~Lady Kix