klotrox16

Hello, I feel that using the compare/contrasting nature of language in line with a deeper meaning is a very original technique and subject manner on your part. I applaud you. ...

I'll wake all night, for glimpses of you bloodshot eyes and manic hair. you are on another plane broken spine, hunched over scribbles on partitions of rubble, you make your ...

I understand this poem really well. I think it's really amazing of you to write this for him, because I'm going through the same thing he is now. There are ...

You are cold waking this morning. The sun tells me, as you will, arrogance is unbecoming. I peel an apple and place it in a chair, breakfast at the table, ...

Though there were some imperfections, overall I really felt your pain. Although my father has always been kind to me, several other people in my life have treated me as ...

I thought this piece was amazing. Almost perfect except for a couple parts: Capricious as the Fox You shouldn't have broken up this line And here: Or coyote Of ancient ...

I thought this was a great poem full of insight and truth that I really resonated with! And your rhyme was off to a good start in the first two ...

I think that overall, you quickly switched from commentary to description to nothing but dialogue, with it not flowing well and in the end not even explaining the narrarator's place ...

This poem was very beautiful and intriguing. My only suggestion is not to split up the stanzas in the middle of the sentence because it gets confusing and breaks the ...

I thought this was a wonderful little poem with a few imperfections; corrections in red: Stab myself with a knife, just so you can bandage me. Starve myself to near-near ...

I thought this was original and cute, and liked your old-fashioned word usage, but for some reason I thought it didn't flow well when in the first stanza wrote it ...

The first stanza was your strongest, just beautiful and so true, and it concluded nicely, but here are my other thoughts, and fyi the corrections are in red: The sad ...

Hey, I think this poem was very interesting, and I like how it was more like prose with less traditional stanzas! I think you should have added more to the ...

I think you have a very good foundation here, but I think it's too short. LEt me clarify: I don't believe that any poem can be "too short" in general, ...

I figured the easiest way to do this was to quote the whole thing a notate it. So here's my review: A little choppy right here Heaving heavily in, my ...