kittykat

*stumbles down to reply box* ha, um well... finally remember to go to other fiction to read your story. sorry! :oops: Okay! This was that great, the beginning was okay, ...

This was... Awesome! I'm not really sure what else to say... It was very orgininal, I've never seen a poem about clay before. Have you posted any other poems like ...

I'm looking forward to Chapter 1 Derek! :D I couldn't find any grammer errors that the others haven't spotted already here. I wish it was a little bit longer... The ...

You just have to make a video or recording of this! I love to hear what it really sounds like. I didn't know what to expect when I read the ...

I have no idea what your doing in this poem... but it wast still good. It was short and I wish you would add a little more onto it so ...

*faints* this was great Jack! much longer than I could have written! :D I don't really know how to review this now... no grammer errors that I could spot... I ...

I've gotten better at critiquing work and this is definitely my longest review yet. As always, this was very good! I can't wait till chapter 2! Well... My corrections have ...

:( No fair, Desprete Romantic got to the the story and grammatical errors before I did. As she said, it was excellent, as usual. I'm glad that they're not dead, ...

This was insanely good aedomir! But there was one mistake that the others haven't written about yet and that is you need a space between the 6th and 7th t ...

No!!! It ended!! No! Keep going! I want to read more! *sobs* This was so good, I couldn't find any errors or spelling mistakes. Keep me posted when you post ...

This was so good... How will I critique this when I have no words to critique it with? I didn't see any errors, but of course I might have over ...

I love it. This is the goriest story here that I've found on YWS. You have great detail and it's not rushed at all. A suggestion that I have is ...

uh ya... where are they in the first place? at school? tell more about the charecters, and by the way...you spelt warm wrong. you spelled it "worm." this is really ...

Ya! I'm the first one to review!! :D This one is better than the first chapter for sure! But you need to remember to put spaces between the paragraphs, which ...

Hmm.. This is really good. :D A lot of excellent discription and not rushed at all. I'm just wondering what's up with the tiny writing. Not that I can't read ...