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Re: 5 Haiku
I'm not a total fan of Haiku's but I liked one in particular. Rushing Water Rivers wind through hills Rushing water 'round the bends Twisting and turning I liked this ...
Aug 30, 2011 -
Re: Sin
Then comes the faultless one, His countenance like the sun's warm glow. He is willing to pay the price For the fields of weeds you sow. Will you accept the ...
Jul 19, 2011 -
Re: Here I Await For You
The thing I love about poetry is that it tells a story. It could be either a sad or happy, a beautiful to horrid, ect. Your poem had beauty in ...
Nov 16, 2010 -
Re: Sleep
Welcome to YWS, river! I'll be your reviewer for today (: First of all we'll have to work on your use of punctuation and capitalization. You don't need to capitalize ...
Nov 7, 2010 -
Re: Process
Nicely written. First off first, I refuse to read what others have posted on ANYONE'S work so if you read something that someone else put, sorry! (: Let's start with ...
Nov 7, 2010 -
Re: Ashes Can Cast a Spell on Me
Wow, first is first. Congrats on making this the almost best piece of work I've read. This had so much imagery, I felt like I was there in your dream. ...
Sep 27, 2010 -
Re: Goodbye
Nicely written, I did feel the pain that you are portraying as I read through this. I wrote a poem semi close to this so I know what you're going ...
Sep 27, 2010 -
Re: Anne, for James
Hello there, I hardly ever look at anyone else's reviews on anyone's work so forgive me if I'm repeating what they say. (: Now for the overall body of your ...
Sep 26, 2010 -
Re: Love
This was cute, I liked it. It was down to the point, the whole poem though did seem to lack something important. I get the idea of love, but I ...
Sep 23, 2010 -
Re: Not Enough Time
First of all I'm sorry for your loss. I lost someone very dear to me and I too was in love with him. This poems had so many emotions and ...
Sep 16, 2010 -
Re: The Debris of our Friendship
Hello! I'm be reviewing your work today. (: One of the things I love about poems is that they have meaning. Yours did have meaning but I felt you expressed ...
Sep 11, 2010 -
Re: none
First and formost; WELCOME TO YWS! It's a blast here. A few pointers here, just skim over this to see what corrections I made to your poem. (: Lying on ...
Sep 8, 2010 -
Re: ----
This poem is beautiful, it flows nicely but I think it doesn't have to much imagery as I was imagining it would have. Though that is not always a problem ...
Sep 6, 2010 -
Re: That Was How He Died
Well, to tell you the truth this poem didn't give me much to work with. The title says it 'That was how he died' you didn't go into much detail ...
Sep 4, 2010 -
Re: An Ode To The Ocean
I didn't look at any other comments posted above me because I want to see your mistakes first hand. So if someone already told you this, SORRY! (: Well here ...
Aug 28, 2010
