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Re: The Wanderer
I really enjoyed reading this. At first, I thought it was someone lost and looking for love but as I continue reading it, I found it's actually about the environment. ...
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Re: Fluffy
I like it. It's really cute about the teddy bear. Even it's short but I enjoyed reading it. Keep on writing poems. You can write poems if you follow your ...
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Re: I Guess This is Good Bye
Hey there, welcome to YWS! Okay, I would like to say something about this part. All I’ve lived was a lie. I believed me when you said, “I love you.” ...
Oct 8, 2010 -
Re: poetry
Hey there, first of all welcome to YWS! I hope that you will enjoyed writing and post most of your stories here. You try and try to get inside, I ...
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Re: Queen of the darkness
Hello, I have not much to say here since lumi had covered pretty much at the reviews part. Anyway, I enjoyed reading it but you need to writing more to ...
Oct 8, 2010 -
Re: The pain I give myself
emmylou1995 wrote: I think this poem is good, but it could be better. Add more imagery, add emotion. Don't repeat stanzas like you did as well. If you add imagery ...
Oct 7, 2010 -
Re: 10,000 Steps
IceCreamMan wrote: This is awesome! I don't agree with Abigail (nothing personal, of course)...the use of "feet" in the poem is perfect. There is no reason to change that; in ...
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Re: This Love
MikaFreak123 wrote: I think I know what you are talking about here. And I sincerely hope it's not about you. I like the repeating of "This is my love" But ...
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Re: Your devil is my lover
Looks like XChangeX and sliented1 had covered most of the reviews part. The tittle kind of bothered me. Anyway, just keep on writing to improve your writings. Good luck and ...
Oct 7, 2010 -
Re: Hair Salon
Hey there, there's not much for left for me to review. The reviews part is pretty much covered. Overall, I enjoyed reading it but the metaphor of "dead fish" kind ...
Oct 7, 2010 -
Re: French Queen of my Life
There's nothing much left for me to review because the reviews part is pretty much covered. Anyway, I enjoyed reading it. Continue writing to improve your writings. Keep writing because ...
Oct 7, 2010 -
Re: This is Who I Am.
MikaFreak123 wrote: I really really like this. Not only because I can relate but because of the way it is written. I like the short lines, they short of give ...
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Re: Draco's first Murder!
Hey there! Seems like there's not much for me to review because the reviews part is pretty much covered. I think if you continue writing, you can write even better ...
Oct 7, 2010 -
Re: The Button (12+ for war/violence themes)
Hey there, Looks like there's nothing much for me to review because Jetpack and Alzora had cover almost everything for the review part. I just want to say that you ...
Oct 7, 2010 -
Re: Fresh Air
Hello, this poem is kind of short but it's okay. But continue writing to make it better. I know you can do it. All in all, I enjoyed reading it. ...
Oct 7, 2010
